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A QuicK DeaTH
04-09-2006, 09:11 AM
Crystal

Summer winds wash over me
Sweet smelling gentle caressing sun lit breeze
I drift away on rolling saffire seas
Oh my darlin baby come with me please

Your eyes see through me like a ghost
like words of wisdom penetrate a classy toast
the arrow's sunk in me like a vicious bite
now here with you think I might be all right

I feel luck and love are one in the same
feeling them both again compells me to scream your name
just one sweet touch to rectify
those black years I'm sure have passed us both by

Oh time reveals all we need to know
What are we really looking for, now time to show
run away with me into the suns rays
to a place of thankfulness from where these dreams first came

Oh lord the fires rage inside
I believe that for the first time I may see the light
oh I know things aren't always as they appear
but it's all becoming so Crystal clear

The fires rage inside
Chills running up and down my spine
I feel that luck has returned me to love
Greases the wheels makes life not so tough
A lesson learned in gratitude
Oh baby I swear I speak the truth
From my heart, my head, my tounge and tooth

well that's it, I don't really have a structure as far as verse/chorus goes yet except that the very last portion will be a little harder and more up beat (a blatant rip off of stairway to heaven, but hey if your gonna thieve someones ideas why not go with the best?)
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