where did my life go(with audio)

[i_need_therapy_17]

you can find the song at www.soundclick.com/bubby tell me what you think...i know i messed up on some of the lyrics but this is just rough form i still need to add a drum beat, solo, and resing it......tell me what you think so far.....WARNING: if you play on hi-fi it will be like listening to a yak back because it messes up...play it on low-fi


verse 1:
lieing here the clock strikes 6
gotta go to work
cant be late, cant debate
cause im there only clerk

when i get there,i stop and stare
until the clock strikes 3
end of shift, tired of it
gonna go home and sleep

chorus:
where did my life go
i thought it went slow
but i didn't relize
that time was passing me by

so my only question
needs second guessing
where did my life go
i thought it went slow

verse 2:
drinking on the weekends
hungover in the morning
late for work ever other monday
and its my last warning

cant stand this, its bull****
why cant i be a kid
they drink and party twice as hard
and still dont get in ****

verse 3:
its the first of the month
and i got to pay the bills
just spend almost all my check
on water food and kids

im lucky if i have enough
to get drunk a few times
i hate this life i hate this job
so i spent all my money to get high

[bleep_bloop]

dosen't sound too good

[Zion Gates]

the singing kinda sucked

[i_need_therapy_17]

i'll admit i cant sing that good....i hope it wasnt too bad though...what you think about the rhythm of the song though

[deadwith0utmusic]

i didnt read you warning and listened to it on hifi.
o man that was hilarious.

[shayne_122]

wow. you screwed yourself over I'd say.

I've never seen so much truth in a username.



The lyrics, I'll be blunt, weren't all that great. Much too literal. Try fancying it up a bit by using better literary technique.. don't say everything straight out, put some fictional narration in as a way of symbolizing things you wish hadn't happened, etc etc..

I just read that over and it's a bit jumbled. But I'm tired. I may edit it tomorrow morning when I'm thinking clearly.

[Questionable_Reflection]

well, where to start, your lyrics seem to be some kind of failed rip of a charles bukowski work, but it is amusing hearing a pubescent ranting about how his life has been pissed away by his own uncreative anti-originality. but then i'm just a scrupulous asshole, to be honest it had potential, just perhaps you should stay away from cliche's. imo