Help Me Please!

[ProfX]

This is just sum random thing i wrote. I would just like sum feedback and sum tips.

(People always stare at one another
Never really seeing what’s beyond the outside
Of the human body
They don’t see the inner being
Just like you never saw) spoken

Me staring at you not getting a reaction
All I wanted was some attention
Now I see that we were never friends
And that you never really liked me

I stare in your eyes
Only to see the reflection of another guy
All you can see, is him watching you
And I’m left on the sidelines staring at

You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at him

You told me that I’m nice
That I’m sweet
But then tell me why
I’m staring at you, with your heads in the clouds

I see you staring at him
Your consumed in a haze
That I cannot penetrate
And slowly I realize how far apart we are

I cannot penetrate your haze cuz you don’t want me to
So I’m caught staring at you with you eyes gazing at him
I tried to resurrect our torn lives
But it takes two to mend what’s broken

I stare in your eyes
Only to see the reflection of another guy
All you can see, is him watching you
And I’m left on the sidelines staring at

You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at him

Soon you’ll snap back to reality
And you’ll wonder where I went
You’ll try to mend what we once had
But you don’t see that there is nothing broken

We were under the impression we were hanging out
But in reality we were in the presents of one another
And I was stuck staring at you
Walking away with him

You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at
Me staring at
You staring at HIM

[shayne_122]

The rhyme scheme makes me want to jump up and happily say, "hellooooo radio-rock!"

(black dot.. I'll see how I can tear this apart in a few hours.)

[TojesDolan]

Not very profound, cliché and overreactful.