Hopeless Dreamer

[xAsix]

"Lies plague humanity"
My eyes fill with tears as I read the following passage.
My damaged heart skips a beat later on as I reminisce on the deceit we filled each others with head with.
The truth half heartedly spoken.
No real lies. But no real truth either
Same with our apologies. And our games.
Not real.
Yet my memories are kept alive by hope.
Meaningless as it is.
Oy Vey. The failure that is man.
The failure that is you and me.
Together we'll rid ourselves of all past guilt trips.
And bask in the glowing light, as the atom bombs light up our neverending lives.

[3 weeks]

"Lies plague humanity"
My eyes fill with tears as I read the following passage.a bit hard to sing
My damaged heart skips a beat later on as I reminisce on the deceit we filled each others with head with.nice but needs breaking down
The truth half heartedly spoken.
No real lies. But no real truth eithernice
Same with our apologies. And our games.
Not real.
Yet my memories are kept alive by hope.
Meaningless as it is.
Oy Vey. The failure that is man.
The failure that is you and me.
Together we'll rid ourselves of all past guilt trips.all good
And bask in the glowing light, as the atom bombs light up our neverending lives.

same sort of structre as your last I'm assuming. Yeah it could work just perhaps some lyrical adjustments to make it easier for someone to sing

[DeadReligion]

The song is pretty good. I've got no bones to pick about anything specific. Except, of course, the title. Change it. ASAP.

What's Oy Vey?