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mutt
03-10-2006, 02:59 PM
A punk rock song by dave sollows

No verse or chorus:
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all our songs we count in 4,
we have a set rhyme scheme,
you'll never get lost in our rhythms,
our melodies are smooth,
our songs are really easy to dance to,
thats because they are all the same,

We wrote the title and a line in the chorus,
the record execs' wrote the rest of it for us,
now we just sit back and wait for the cheque,

we might have to go and do a support tour,
to keep the sales at the record store,
Our sets dont go on for too long,
They've done studies,
long songs tend to bore morons,
and we like to cater to our audience.

Our title is the hook in the chorus,
we go verse chorus verse chorus verse,
CHORUS!
The cd has 24 tracks the 3 and 7th aren't that bad,
the rest we put to make you feel,
like your getting your moneys worth,

We are against mp3's,
We don't want people listening for free,
Since we cant rely on proceeds
generated by our live shows
some seats are empty,
I gotta get a bigger car,
I need a bigger jet with a fully loaded bar,
dont you just feel sorry for me?
Bub
03-10-2006, 03:42 PM
A punk rock song by dave sollows

Our sets dont go on for too long,
They've done studies,
long songs tend to bore morons,
and we like to cater to our audience.


Isn't this a complete turnaround to what the rest of your song is about?

Also, its a crap subject for a song and you sound liek you've put a maximum of 4 minutes "work" into it. There's nothing good about this song in my opinion, they're very immature lyrics, the rhyme scheme, flow, rhythm and everything is hopelessly nonexistant...

You didn't try, did you?
BassMan182
03-10-2006, 04:06 PM
agreed, it didn't do anything for me. ironically, i read the whole thing though, which is more than i do with most songs on here. maybe because it was so bad and it intrigued me...
over_bends
03-10-2006, 04:10 PM
Just a boring, attempted-satirical rant that falls flat on its face.
Bub
03-10-2006, 04:28 PM
agreed, it didn't do anything for me. ironically, i read the whole thing though, which is more than i do with most songs on here. maybe because it was so bad and it intrigued me...

go give mine a read. go ooooooooon :P
DeadReligion
03-10-2006, 06:35 PM
Very...Jello Biafra-esque. Only, in terms of quality, this falls so tragically short its...well no, its hilarious. I feel you, but you just put your anger to use in a crappy way. Too angsty, childish...
mutt
03-12-2006, 02:19 PM
busted...it took me 20 minutes to write and edit this...it was just an idea that popped into my head...ill probablly still use it as it is immature, and well, hey thats what i like about it...it looks like something a high school student would write who only listens to blink182.... thanks for the real honesty guys!
insanepunkguy
03-12-2006, 02:49 PM
it took me 20 minutes to write and edit this...

man, i dont take more than that on writing mosta my songs (in their basic form anyway, lyrics, vocals, guitar)
and yeh i know im abit pretentious in my writing, but thats ridiculous, its a rubbish subject to talk about, it sounds like an advertisment for your band, and when i first read it i thought it was an introductory speech to a song, and wondered where the song was, then realised that was the song.
throw it away lol