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SkaterGirl14
03-08-2006, 06:11 AM
NOTE TO FEDS: MY NAME IS MIKE SMITH AND I LIVE IN THE USA.

First off, I am not really a 14 year old girl. I am a 19 year old guy.

The background of the song is this. Two years back I went through some really cruddy times, in which two people very close to me died and although I was never criminally accused of murder, alot of people blame me for the deaths and it is still a very sore issue throughout my community. After that I started getting involved in crime and became addicted to drugs. A few months ago (while I was still hooked) I was befriended by a ten year old girl who obviously was infatuated with me. To be perfectly honest this was flattering as I was semi-homeless and only uninebriated for a few hours each day.

Anyway, I never acted on her advances but I never turned her away either, because I liked having her around. At a time where I was deliberately taking extremely large doses of downer pills to see whether I could survive, having someone who does not write you off as a junkie, or a murdering junkie lowlife, is amazingly special. It kind of gave me a reason to live, a reason not to keep throwing away my life and I became very attached to her.

Now I'm cleanish, but I've started to realise while I've always told myself she's in love with me and I'm not in love with her, I'm actually extremely emotionally attached to her. So much so I feel jealous when I see her playing with kids her own age etc.

So now it cuts me up, because if things continue going how they are I'm going to hurt myself even more, but worse than all I will end up hurting her. At the moment I feel like turning back to the pills.

Here's the song:



I know you love me,
I think I love you too.
But loving you is my suicide,
It's something I can't do.
But right now you're all that I think about.

My ships a question,
That's blown offcourse.
You look like something like my answer,
You sort of have the same voice,
And in my rough sea you're something I can recognise.

It's time I threw you back into your world,
A world where you can grow up, a world where you can live.
It's time you left my realm of drugs and thugs and pills that take you down.
Jump off my jagged rocks and land on level ground.

You know you saved me,
From hurting myself self.
But now I fear I'll break you,
Knock you off the top shelf.
Then it's too late to pick up the pieces.

It's time I threw you back into your world,
A world where you can grow up, a world where you can live.
It's time you left my realm of drugs and thugs and pills that take you down.
Jump off my jagged rocks and land on level ground.

Now I'm falling,
In my darkest abyss,
Cause all my good intentions,
Have only come to this.
It's time to lay back and embrace the blackness.

Tooth Ache
03-08-2006, 06:38 AM
man, you're a bit of a fruit cake.

TojesDolan
03-08-2006, 02:43 PM
Don't listen to this kid. Anyway, it's bad to see what happened in your life that time. It must suck to be pointed out, and being left out of society. I can't really relate, but I see what you're going for.

The poem/lyric is... bland. Not because it didn't have a great idea, it's just not that amazing. Aesthetically, it shows nothing new. I'm glad you face your problems in a "positive" way now, but for what poetry accounts for, this isn't outstanding. A great effort, and a very simplistic structure, but it doesn't strike me as amazing.

Nonetheless, in it's simplicity it's a great piece.

FA
03-08-2006, 03:45 PM
Wow, are you getting help for your drug problems? I'd really start there first, but writing helps get things out too. I'll get to this later tonight if I can.

SkaterGirl14
03-09-2006, 01:08 AM
Don't listen to this kid. Anyway, it's bad to see what happened in your life that time. It must suck to be pointed out, and being left out of society. I can't really relate, but I see what you're going for.

The poem/lyric is... bland. Not because it didn't have a great idea, it's just not that amazing. Aesthetically, it shows nothing new. I'm glad you face your problems in a "positive" way now, but for what poetry accounts for, this isn't outstanding. A great effort, and a very simplistic structure, but it doesn't strike me as amazing.

Nonetheless, in it's simplicity it's a great piece.
I get this quite alot, could you give me an example of something that is, in your opinion, remarkable.

mojoman0
03-09-2006, 05:05 AM
try to use deeper thought....express these feelings without actually saying them...and check out some lyrics by Vendetta Red...their singer is amazing...uses a lot of alliteration...words that start with similar sounds frequently...catches ur attention...

jb6oclock
03-09-2006, 11:23 AM
ok I don't understand how you all missed the point here, dude your friggin sick and a petifile A TEN YEAR OLD?!!!!! you f'ing fuk I hope you eat too many pills personally. I can't believe this thread is allowed here. I think I'm going to copy this and send it to a certain government organization and let them sort out your problems for you.

TwiztidLotus17
03-09-2006, 03:51 PM
ok I don't understand how you all missed the point here, dude your friggin sick and a petifile A TEN YEAR OLD?!!!!! you f'ing fuk I hope you eat too many pills personally. I can't believe this thread is allowed here. I think I'm going to copy this and send it to a certain government organization and let them sort out your problems for you.

do you need to be a dick about it? I understand what this child means to him, and (although it may be weird to you) he didn't do anything with the damn kid. If you're gonna get all gross about it, pretend the kid is his cousin tagging along or sum ****. I don't really see why i took the time to reply to this but hopefully you'll consider holding yourself back anything at all if you're gonna act like that.

As for the poem, I'd like to help with a good crit but I got work to do so I'll just like to reiterate the idea of using metaphors or other literary devices..

good luck with this, not to shabby. just needs to be rewashed and polished?

*i'd also like to note that your name and avatar are a bit disturbing if u r what u say :/