What d'ya think?

[slutgash]

you really rubbed off on me
now i'm so lazy
I just can't see things through

you're so selfish baby
look how you've made me
treat people like you do

Now I'm free of you baby
I'm still too lazy
But now i can see through you

[jb6oclock]

decent concept but I think your going to need to expand on it in order to get crits.