ithink - what do you think of this song?

[Horatiu]

hey this is a song i wrote, what do you think about it overall

http://media.putfile.com/ithink53

[Jhaatwt]

I don't like it. Don't slur your words, get a better chord progression, and sing in key, then you'll be golden.

[Horatiu]

thank you for your reply

the song dosen't have a chord progression (except chorus) it just goes from riff to riff (trying to be original) and its only half the song (it got cut off)

i try to sing in key..

any more please?

[A_Guy]

Uhhh, it's ok. I think the biggest problem is the singing. Make it more exciting and like the previous poster said, less slurred. Also, kind of boring with just guitar and vox, add something to spice it up.