First shot at an original song.. "We had a good trip, Thank you"

[ljump12]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=473574

My friend wrote the lyrics; it needs alot of tweaking, and i probally need to add a chorus, but what do you think so far?

[waz416]

I like the guitar riff....though sounded liek theere was a lil off note in teh intro....man taht harmonica is insaly cool....ure vocals are really nice too....def. suit the song well......i liek this stufff....everyonece in a while. its nice to chill out and listne to some realzing music...!!!......realyl cool........if u wanan critic mine...!!!. http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=436007 ..................PEAC EOUT

[Mr.Chaotix]

Gud wrk.....gud lyrics(stars 4 yer friend).... gr8 vocals.....a wee bit of variation can do wonders.
Its nice to listen to the slo acoustic song and this is just it....plz do not add a chorus..... there is enough and more individuality to the song....let iot be...dont force anything in. Inaccuracies of a non-studio recording are evident but these inaccuracies are the beauty of an acoustic work.

Gud job.....4/5 (thats hi but damn, its worth it!)