No More

[slickathenyou]

I wrote this song while listening to The Ramones 'Howlin at the Moon'. I also pioneered my usage of little to no rhyme scheme. Please crit, and leave a link to your song please.


I aint gonna steal no more
Petty theft is not what im all about
I used to take just when I was hungry
But I could pay for what I had (la la la)

I aint gonna steal no more
It's not mongo that told me
Now I can afford, now I can afford
I figured it out all on my own

Chorus
Cuz I gave it up unlike robin hood
I wasn't doin it for a greater good
Now im done... now im done

I aint gonna steal no more
Ill get caught one of these days
That's not the reason I changed my mind
Security's so easy I can put it away (la la la)

I aint gonna steal no more
I aint got a cause, I got alotta flaws
That I can attest, lay it to rest
Kick the habit and now I'm done

Also, 'mongo' is a reference to one of my other songs about how my conscience's name is mongo.

[slickathenyou]

Shameful bump

[mutant!]

Idk, dude, it seems pretty standard. I'm feeling the lack of metaphors and similes and stuff here. I'm curious, what kind of accompaniment do you have in mind?

[littletom]

I'm imagining this with a simple power chord punk backing. Am I right?

I know songs don't need to rhyme but for a simple song like this I'm pretty sure you could make it rhyme if you wanted to.

Also "no more" is a forgettable title as it could be about anything. I'd at least go with "I ain't gonna steal no more."

[slickathenyou]

K, thanks tom. And yea, simple chord backing.