Cared

[Stuff9238]

i wrote this idk..........


Started out at the age of four
First time I walked through school doors
Little kid without a clue or direction
Afraid to talk for fear of rejection

5th grade at the top of my game
Not even the teacher had remembered my name
No more grade school, a fresh start
If only someone had had a heart

I walk these halls alone again
Lack of knowledge, lack of friends
Surrounding people all just stare
It’s just too bad that no one cared

7th grade I was falling apart
Failing every class, I failed to take part
My teachers had expressed their concern
Over my lack of wanting to learn

8th grade meant graduation time again
Still alone, not a single friend
Without this new start
I’d put a knife through my heart

I walk these halls alone again
Lack of knowledge, lack of friends
Surrounding people all just stare
It’s just too bad that no one cared

Freshmen year has been no better
My girl dumped me I just let her
I thought I finally made a friend
I’m neglected once again…….

[dyuaru]

Kinda an interesting way to write a song, with all the grades and your going through of school life. I think its kinda bleak since there's little to no imagery or metaphors in it. I don't really understand the whole message that your trying to portray since it's basically a biography in the form of a song. Maybe try adding a bit more imagery and putting a message to it all cause right now it just looks like a complaint of how much your life sucks, which to me, isn't all that artistic.

[screamo_is-mylife]

yeah ur song was pretty good it reminded me alot of blink, and bowling for soup b/c of the grades and it seemd a lil pop punkish.. i agree there really no imagery

[Stuff9238]

pop-punkish was sort of what i was going for....uhh imagery explain......

[screamo_is-mylife]

Ok you have lil or no rhyme so it would kinda be hard to come up with a smooth rythem and like what dyuaru said it was more like an boigraphy put into a song so maybe try rhyming a lil more... but i like you 1 stanza and the course and its not a bad song at all