Finally... A Chance To Be In The Spotlight

[GreenDayFrk88]

Song i wrote pretty quickly so it is a little rough

(Verse 1)

The lights go out
All eyes are on you
Now it's time to make your move
It's the only thing that you can do
This is your last chance
To prove who you are
So don't waste it away
Show them you're a star

(Chorus)

Finally... A chance to be number one
A chance to be in the spotlight
Finally... It's your time
To show them what you've got
And not what you've forgot

(Verse 2)

There may be a chill running down your spine
Something I'm sure isn't fine
But the clock has struck 12
No more time to dwell
On past mistakes

(Repeat Chorus)

(Bridge)

Where did you all go wrong
Your last chance is gone
Should you just go back to start
Cause you know your falling apart

(Repeat Chorus)

THE END....

Tell me what you think....

[dyuaru]

Its alright, needs work on some imagery and maybe stick a couple metaphors in there. Very straight forward song, not saying that's bad, just might bore some people when reading it. Kinda reminds me of 8mile by eminem haha.(btw does not like rap)
Anyway the ending is a bit surprising because it went from a more positive theme to where it goes into a bit of an emo-ish theme where now all hope is like lost. I think you should stick with one of the topics since two opposite topics in one song dont always work

[GreenDayFrk88]

thanks for the crit i appriciate it

[GreenDayFrk88]

any more crits?