Though

[FACELESSnotBASSLESS]

Though clouds are often jealous,
And stars secrete sick sounds,
I wake to sounds of reveille,
And pine for the profound.

Though fear’s six seats from nowhere,
And meters East of Hell,
I dread the fact that I’m afraid,
Of Absentia’s lovely knell.

Though change is next to Godliness,
As labyrinths are to Grace,
I find I return to Morella’s grave,
(Though my steps I can’t retrace.)

Though men in crowds are creatures,
Though creatures are alone,
Though I bow to his Excellency,
‘Although’ will never show…

[Jubella]

well, it doesn't look so bad, though that some lines look a bit weird. but the major problem is that i absolutely dont get anything about this. and i cant really crit something that i dont understand.

[BurtonBassist]

I don't like it because it doesn't tell a story, or even make sence to me,
or at least in my head it doesn't