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Anti-Prefix

01-02-2006, 04:45 PM

Hello my good friends. :)

As you may or may not know, my one year anniversary of these here punk forums is this Friday! Now before you go call your mother and tell her of the good news (and to bake me cake). Tell her I don't drink milk. Secondly, that I am proposing a fun contest! Sure, it's been a bumpy- wait. No, it has been a rigorous year, from The Playlist Thread to Black F'ag. But, I have really enjoyed getting to know everyone and have learned how awesome you guys are. Anyway.

The objective of this contest is to construe a song. The song is preferrably to be political or social, something mundane of the punk genre. Now, before you go crying saying you want to do something else, this is still pretty open-ended. However, if you wish to write a parody or a satire song based on previous writings- feel free. No harm done, but, it will not be taken into the polls and voting that will proceed this thread. Thus, this is to be taken more seriously.

The goal is to write a song that people will vote for, yet at the same time making it a quality, punk song. Please make the song long enough to tell it is one. I cannot stress enough, I will be getting the mods to clean up the thread frequently. So, please, no spam.

This post will preferrably be your song, or eventually will be. The reason I am promulgating this is to have a more organized, well-kept thread. However, you may use your post as you'd like. THERE WILL BE TIME FOR CRITIQUE (destructive or deprecative) LATER! None-the-less, I am hoping to have great fun with this and will be posting a song myself.

Also, after this thread we will try to narrow down the 20-30 best songs (if there are that many) and vote from them. We will make another thread for critique and to confine the voting. This will make the voting easier, the polls easier, and my life easier. I hope to have the winner chosen by this Friday night. However, if an extension is in order, then it will not be a problem.

I thought this would be an enjoyable, constructive, and positive thread. Hopefully it will get some of you to think, and possibly, learn a thing or two as well. If there are any questions or comments do not post them in this thread! Simply e-mail me: antiprefix@gmail.com. I will be happy to answer any questions or feedback!

Have fun and get writing! :)

Anxious

01-02-2006, 04:48 PM

So its just lyrics?

lynch_me

01-02-2006, 04:50 PM

Sure, it's been a bumpy- wait. No, it has been a rigorous year, from The Playlist Thread to Black F'ag. But, I have really
:lol:

and

Here are my lyrics:

The Government is bad
They sometimes make me sad
but mostly mad

Oi oi oi oi oi oi
beer beer beer
oi oi oi oi oi oi
beer beer beer

and that's all i have so far.

CameoRole

01-02-2006, 08:04 PM

I know you laid down the rules, but could social be taken as emotional? Or does it have to be a loud, angry critique of society?

Ghostfire3

01-02-2006, 08:06 PM

psh. emotional.

Anti-Prefix

01-02-2006, 08:17 PM

I know you laid down the rules, but could social be taken as emotional? Or does it have to be a loud, angry critique of society?

Definitely. I just want it to be in the same ballpark, that way it's fair. But definitely Alex.

clustifux

01-02-2006, 09:43 PM

i have like 20 songs written...but ill put one of my favorite

One Nation Under God

standing at the golden gates
waiting for him to show his face
so i can see if he is real
so i can give him this pain i feel

one nation under god is what we teach the kids
so they dont turn into terrorists
salute the flag at the schools
teach them to be brainwashed fools

i dont need this F*cking Sh*t
your born you die annd thats it
and in the end, what will begin
a new meaning to life, or a bitter end

Seperate the church and state

lets burn a cross to show ignorance
gay bash the inocent
feedom has no F*cking meaning
just like what your F*cking preaching

all these kids in the punk rock scene
just dont know what this really means
lets take back our F*Cking rights
lets teach those bastards whats F*cking right

i dont need this F*cking Sh*t
your born you die annd thats it
and in the end, what will begin
a new meaning to life, or a bitter end

sperate the church and state...

SantaDuJuan

01-03-2006, 01:01 AM

Oh ****!
Sam you know how to make threads, I'll think of a song and write it tomorrow in my classes, and then post it.

SOULSEEK BUDDIES UNITE!
ps Shai Hulud is nice.

echos

01-03-2006, 01:05 AM

I have one I really like, unfortunately it's in my binder at school and I'm on christmas break, so I won't be able to post it until I return to school.

So no judgings till then, please.

Criss Frantic

01-03-2006, 01:39 AM

Subvert_bassist

01-03-2006, 02:40 AM

Killers, Thugs and Maniacs

God bless US army trucks
And God bless all you ignorant f*cks
Who live by what you're told
And not what you see

God bless CNN's TV war
And don't forget the Marine Corps
Who give their lives
Protecting you and me

Killers, Thugs and Maniacs
Enforcing peace and democracy
Killers, Thugs and Maniacs
Murdering to keep the people free

God bless ye of little faith
And God bless those who love to hate
And those who don't love
Anything at all

God bless all the patriots
The mindless, brainwashed idiots
The ones who light the fuse
And heed the call

Killers, Thugs and Maniacs
Enforcing peace and democracy
Killers, Thugs and Maniacs
Are murdering to keep the people free
The "God Bless" concept was a good idea, but other than that, that song seems kinda too generic street-punky.

i have like 20 songs written...but ill put my favorite

One Nation Under God

standing at the golden gates
waiting for him to show his face
so i can see if he is real
so i can give him this pain i feel

one nation under god is what we teach the kids
so they dont turn into terrorists
salute the flag at the schools
teach them to be brainwashed fools

i dont need this F*cking Sh*t
your born you die annd thats it
and in the end, what will begin
a new meaning to life, or a bitter end

Seperate the church and state

lets burn a cross to show ignorance
gay bash the inocent
feedom has no F*cking meaning
just like what your F*cking preaching

all these kids in the punk rock scene
just dont know what this really means
lets take back our F*Cking rights
lets teach those bastards whats F*cking right

i dont need this F*cking Sh*t
your born you die annd thats it
and in the end, what will begin
a new meaning to life, or a bitter end

sperate the church and state...
Once again, a bit generic, and too many curse words. It's okay to use them, but too many can ruin a song. Some of the lines with deeper, more abstract meaning were good, though.

:lol:

and

Here are my lyrics:

The Government is bad
They sometimes make me sad
but mostly mad

Oi oi oi oi oi oi
beer beer beer
oi oi oi oi oi oi
beer beer beer

and that's all i have so far.
Perfect oi song, haha. Next time, mention suspenders, say something about "Punx 'n' skins", and toss "we are the kids!" in for added pleasure.

just_a_girl

01-03-2006, 03:48 AM

Ska, Emo, Crust, Pop Punk and Hardcore,
If it won't fit in your box then you get bored.
Looks like you've become a label whore.
Do you even like the music anymore?

If I make something new where will you put it?
Punk is dead, and you killed it.

You only like bands that dress like you,
mohawk cuts and hair died blue,
otherwise they're a poser, right? Well I got news...
A punk can wear Hollister too.

The brand isn't the point, that's what you don't get.
Punk is dead, and you killed it.

I can't remember life before "the scene."
I've forgotten what Punk really means
And I hate to say it but sometimes it seems
that we're no more than metal studs and ripped jeans

Did I come to see the band or to hear you bitch?
Punk is dead, and you killed it.

Shut up you elitist prick.
Can't you just enjoy the ****?
I used to have a band but now I quit.
Punk is dead, and you killed it.

Punk is dead, and you killed it.

Think Lenny's, "Rock And Roll Is Dead" reversed. And not as good of course.

(P.S. - I thought the critique part came later?)

Pseudo Man

01-03-2006, 04:27 AM

TICKETPUNK

Paint your face and die your hair
And learn to play guitar
and find a name to summarise
and one to epitomise
now clean it up, make it look nice
and make it all part of your guise
paint it black and white to make it clear
and then paint it pink 'coz that's in this year but

When it get's to the end of the day
I think I can safely speak for all when I say that
There's not a single punk who wants you here at all
you're nothing but a disgrace to those who came before

Write down a checklist
of words that end in "ist"
like first put down anarchist
then put revivalist
and when you are commanded
act all disenchanted
and disenfranchised
when they begin to analyse

With every single breath that you take
It's another black mark that you make
on the graves of sid vicious, and Joe Strummer
Three of the Ramones, and johnny thunders

(shameless Clash rip off breakdown with contrasting descending/ascending major chord progressions from the two different guitar parts... you know what they sound like: Stay Free, White Man in Hammersmith Palais, Tommy Gun)

Now find a word for
Whatever's at your core
like Emocore or sadcore
or Gothcore or just W@NK-CORE!
we already have a name for
what you are to be called
and the word for how much you suck
is called... a ticketpunk...
Ticketpunks... **** Off
Ticketpunks... **** Off .etc

Criss Frantic

01-03-2006, 04:28 AM

The "God Bless" concept was a good idea, but other than that, that song seems kinda too generic street-punky.

Well that's to be expected from a generic, street-punky band such as mine.:wave:

Pseudo Man

01-03-2006, 04:43 AM

Am I allowed another song?
If not just don't count my first one.

Pseudo Man

Hey there Mr Pseudo Man
You got that pseudo girl to hold your pseudo hand
What's on your pseudo mind?
Are you planning your next pseudo line?
I'm sure it's straight from the heart
Like a pure work of pseudo art
And you know you'll never be to blame
Because you're only known by your pseudo name

Do you know the real man
He's got the real money in his real hand
He's got you under his thumb
And you wouldn't know 'coz you're too dumb

Hey there Mr Pseudo Man
You got that pseudo girl to hold your pseudo hand
What about your pseudo shirt
it's all covered in pseudo dirt
You know you look pretty pseudo slick
In your pseudo-retro trendy chic
And you know you'll never be to blame
Because your only known by your pseudo name

Do you know the real man
He's got the real money in his real hand
He's got you under his thumb
And you wouldn't know 'coz you're too dumb

Hey there Mr Pseudo Man
You got that pseudo girl to hold your pseudo hand
What's on your pseudo mind?
Are you planning your next pseudo line?
I'm sure it's straight from the heart
Like a pure work of pseudo art
And you know you'll never be to blame
Because you're only known by your pseudo name

I don't know if you get it in america where I assume most of you live, but in Australia there's this big fashion for shirts that have dirt painted on and patches already sewn onand that kind of thing

sketchyjoe

01-03-2006, 06:04 AM

BY THE TIME THE DAY'S DONE

To crossroads will we return
Or carry on with no concern
For those who will in philosophy burn
Til they are just one exalted urn
Will we fade away, or explode or learn
To avoid the wrong up or downturn
When all towns stop, sojourn
In raucous subdued celebration.

As with this self-awareness curse
That plagues my psyche and makes me nurse
Thoughts of a time when I can converse
Without prior need to rehearse
Where I will not drown when fully immerse
Those who malign will reimburse
And beep warning as once and for all reverse
This de facto segregation

At every point asking "Is this my scene?"
Seeing every pub tableau like it's Bob Dylan's Dream
Console myself with pre-flood track fourteen
An obscure t-shirt and battered jeans
Gasping to breathe pure serene
Only ignorance is truly obscene
Life requires not caffeine nor screen
Nor overheard conversation

Not men in grey or men in black
Not meaningless platitudes getting your back
Not always lost on the beaten track
Twist your knife in every crack
Ignore the diversionary attack
Of every bitter corrupted hack
Up against you the odds will stack
And your ideals above your station.

With wasted latter-day Wilfred Owens
Things are for doing, not for showing
That they know not what should be knowing
To where or what they should be going
Just following that cool breeze blowing
When it howls they howl and ebbs they're slowing
Green contours all at once plateauing
To missed reincarnation

Where people worship good not god
Have no fear of going beneath the sod
Or up against the firing squad
Minds shackled to the lightning rod
Over constraints ride roughshod
Yet still always acknowledge and nod
Strange isn't strange and odd is not odd
There is no blood relation

But will failed attempts at unity
And lost notions of community
Grasp at straws of opportunity
And if one's caught, with impunity
And full diplomatic immunity
Destroy with barbs far too witty
Hidden in nudity ads' catchy new ditty
For charitable organisations

When you let your curses loose
Without incurring a People vs Bruce
A tire swing made from the noose
An adult's game of Duck Duck Goose
Clear as glass, as a mirror's obtuse
Or an expiring temporary truce
Letting fly with more abuse
Like wildly barking guard Alsatians

With small worries as big as big
And into history digger's dig
While those who choose to live as Stig
**** out their own sacred fig
To the music the triggers jig
And the drunken swaggerer's swig
When they mean to zag they only zig
Into their procrastination

Who hear the thought-curdling almighty crash
As angels or angles do tangled clash
In blood-red battlestreets of urban trash
Whilst horrors past stay in our cache
Whilst horrors now tumble into ash
And once again it is all rehashed
No-one will get to wear this sash
And conduct post-mortem examination

But will the conflicts always churn
With clandestine operations
There is no force in a universe
That can stop the ones that they shun
Against this slaying of light, screams stream
Without moral or legal obligation
Who bomb the brains, take all the flack
Ignore anti trust legislation
Images from heads are flowing
With free, sweet free association
Peas breaking from their pod
Inspiring police investigations
Look upon them with new pity
At the guilt by assimilation
Put your perfectly-formed point to use
With full demand for explanation
The downward spiral, a suckling pig
Tommorrow not the final revelation
But visions of the future flash
A simple, equal inspiration

TruGibson

01-03-2006, 06:11 AM

The Sandman comes
the sandman goes
and when he finally gets here
he'll notice the bodies
he'll notice the rows

coheneran

01-03-2006, 06:57 AM

I figure it's time I posted before Sam abandons this thread:P.

First of all, the essential part, the excuses. This is probably one of my worst written songs, but along with that, one of my favourites, and one of my least Anti-Flag-like creations, which I'm seeing a lot of. About a year ago in Britain there was this big "Yob scare" where the media made it out that teenagers were out-of-control sadistic junkies and for a week or so a hoodie was the equivalent of an SS uniform. Some shopping centres even banned people wearing hoodies. Things looked to be about to get worse for young people, and it made me incredibly angry, and I wrote a song about it. Some of the things in the chorus happened, according to the mass media. Enjoy.

Yob Culture

yob culture!
bringing you **** in a bag
yob culture!
pissing you off
yob culture!
wearing hoodies in a park
yob culture!
the last word in pop

you think you can stop us?
you think you can control us?
you think you can bring us
back from the edge?
we're high on smack
and we like to smoke crack
and we like to push cats
off a ledge
they always land on their feet don't they?

yob culture!
pissing in your mouth
yob culture!
ripping you off
yob culture!
corrupting your kids
yob culture!
you know what we means?

like we're gonna listen
when you tell us to shut up
like we're gonna take it
sitting down and on our arse
you think we need some discipline
we're mentally unfit?
you think we need your expertise
we'll stamp on your pipe
we'll play the tune that'll lead our lives

this is our generation bitch
yours is old and grey
these are our catastrophes
to deal with as we may
we don't want your prozac
we don't want your ****ty pills
you keep tryin
we'll keep sayin
"NO old man
you're nearly dead
and this is our beginning"

yob culture!
you're ****ting in your pants
yob culture!
we're puttin it full blast
yob culture!
we got you on your knees
yob culture!
we does what we feels!

nitzguy

01-03-2006, 09:22 AM

drive american or don't drive at all

this song is about how GM(general motors) closed 2 plants in my hometown of Lansing, Michigan... and how they go over seas or down to mexico to produce the cars that they say are "American")

hey hey hey hey
GM just drove 3000 workers' away
now mexico will make our cars
an our US fathers drown their tears in some bar

American cars arn't even American
Mexican labor is cheaper by far
toyota is more american than GM
they have several plants with American men

shut us out, knock us down
but i won't be driving a GM in my town
**** GM and the money they make
turn Lansing into a mistake

hey hey hey hey
GM just drove 3000 workers' away
now mexico will make our cars
an our US fathers drown their tears in some bar

kick us in the teeth
but for the safest plant in america
why treat us like cheats?

Criss Frantic

01-03-2006, 09:49 AM

USA - AOK

I don't wanna die for another country's plans
I don't wanna kill to put money in their hands
Don't wanna take orders from ignorant ****s
Don't wanna fight, don't wanna kill kill kill

Load your guns, let's go to war
Don't look back, don't look forward
No time for peace when the boss says "War"
I'm an American, a bloodthirsty bore!

I don't care cos I'm an American
And I don't care cos I've got a gun
I don't care cos I'm an American
And we've already won, so dumb

Pillage, plunder, destroy destruct
Don't care at all about the murder you commit
Rape you, kill
Crush you burn,
Do it for the Stars and Stripes

See you in the paper and I see you in the news
I'm so sick of your face, I can't help but hate you
Where's the peace and freedom you promote?
All I see is greed, constitution you wrote?

All you do is crush, all you do is kill
All you do is rape, murder: 60, peace: Nil
I don't care, I'm America
I don't care, you can all go to hell!

I don't care cos I'm an American
And I don't care cos I've got a gun
I don't care cos I'm an American
And we've already won, so dumb

Pillage, plunder, destroy destruct
Don't care at all about the murder you commit
Rape you, kill
Crush you burn,
Do it for the Stars and Stripes

USA is A-OK, the USA is A-OK now
USA is A-OK, the USA is A-OK yeah now.

Anti-Prefix

01-03-2006, 02:33 PM

Reserved.

ThePassionOfTheKasey

01-03-2006, 02:48 PM

I'll edit one in later

Liebensaft

01-03-2006, 03:04 PM

I am reserving this space for later use.

I've got a song I've just written but it's not exactly the average punk song. I'm not sure whether I should post it or not.
Do it. Do it. Do it.

PS - Reserved...maybe?

holy_roller99

01-03-2006, 03:54 PM

so posting something. i will get some inspiration and add to this just you wait. besides how would the voting get done?

DaveToopes

01-03-2006, 10:23 PM

This reminds me of Anti-Flag. If I can, I'll try to write something that doesn't pertain to war, but I'm not much of a songwriter, so don't expect anything.

Anti-Prefix

01-04-2006, 05:28 PM

Bump

sketchyjoe

01-04-2006, 07:47 PM

Post you lazy bastards. It's not hard to write a song. Get involved. Do something.

just_a_girl

01-04-2006, 09:15 PM

Post you lazy bastards. It's not hard to write a song. Get involved. Do something.

We have plenty of entries, can't we just start voting now?

Anti-Prefix

01-04-2006, 09:17 PM

We have plenty of entries, can't we just start voting now?

We don't nearly have enough. Besides, not many regulars posted, and the songs that are posted lack cartharsis.

CameoRole

01-04-2006, 09:44 PM

When is it due by?

GermFreeAdolescent

01-04-2006, 10:11 PM

Could I possibly post another if I have a good idea, or are we limited to one song?

Criss Frantic

01-05-2006, 03:21 AM

We don't nearly have enough. Besides, not many regulars posted, and the songs that are posted lack cartharsis.

Catharsis? They're punk songs, not Greek tradgedies!

TeleJon

01-05-2006, 08:06 AM

this is straight up gay
gay as a homo
real gay

Jessizzle

01-05-2006, 08:54 AM

Ska Is Good
Ska Is Great
Lets All Get Wasted
And Go Skank!

coheneran

01-05-2006, 05:13 PM

Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall, Humpty Dumpty had a big fall and got a BUMP!

Anti-Prefix

01-05-2006, 06:23 PM

I think there is an extension in order. We need atleast 15 songs.

Kithkin

01-06-2006, 03:59 AM

You have to give it at least a week.

Good songs aren't written on a whim.

Kithkin

01-06-2006, 04:29 AM

Though... on that note. A song on a whim:

Damn Green Light

My voice is harsh but the message is strong
Lend your voice to mine and send the message along

I cant help but think
as I lay awake in my bed
of the lives we could save
if we worked in a logical way
if we reject all the ****
that makes the poor people pay
and rethought what we think
of the american way

The poor aren't the rich and
the rich aren't the poor
we aren't bridging the gap
we aren't opening doors
the poor are promised profit paths
for performing sixty hours a week
making half of the daily allowance
of a CEO's kid

Their american dream is a dream
They see Gatsby's bullshit green light
They go down in the sixtyfifth round
They never put up a fight
My voice is harsh
But you hear
That the message is strong
Lend your voice
up with mine
and send the message along

The worker clocks in
he works dusk to dawn
the factory churns
And the worker just yawns
The company's in red
upgrades its machines
Profits are doubled
and Manpower halved
It makes the board members happy
and 400 men out of work
It's what we call a fair system
These free markets at work

Their american dream is a dream
They see Gatsby's ****ing green light
They go down in the sixtyfifth round
They never put up a fight
My voice may be harsh but the message is strong
Put your voice next to mine and send the message along

coheneran

01-06-2006, 05:24 AM

Your song is awesome.

Vietnow

01-06-2006, 06:28 AM

You can't Control the Counter Culture

You cannot control the counter culture
you cannot buy our soul
you can spread your ignorance
but in the end they'll all know

Greed will succumb to some of us
but it cannot take us all
some might be in it for the fashion
but baby i'm in it for the whole

How can you claim Edge and Veg
when you know one day you will fall
How can you join the 'army'
when you don't support the 'war'

This song is about how people will claim that they are Vegetarian, and Straight-edge, but in the long run think they will go back on their word. The whole meaning is that why claim something you don't fully believe in. Put this song to some Crusty/d-beat/PV and it will probably make it sound alot better.

---

I didn't have time to read all that stuff in the first post, so if this doesn't fit the criteria, then delete this post I guess?

coheneran

01-06-2006, 08:38 AM

It is political, and doesn't sound like anti-flag, so it fits dude:thumb:

White light/White heat

01-06-2006, 11:18 AM

Erm, i suck as a lyricist. ah well. This one has no title yet.

Urban waste dripping down my face
looking back on the road as we abandon this place
Develop our minds, develop our ideas
refuse to eat up our space, set a standard to our peers
As we devour whats left, delete our resources
we will look back one day, and see these are the causes
abolition of life, we put ourselves in debt
of a chance for survival, making it harder to get

As i look up to the sky, great clouds of grey
i can see the decline, i can see the decay
the decay of the people, as they let it go by
action must be taken, we have to try
demand to the leaders, of the destructional schemes
that they make a plan to demolish the dreams
of the hand of death and his final solution
to get rid of us all, with a mass of pollution

Look at what we're heading for

Subvert_bassist

01-06-2006, 11:34 AM

Scratch my first one, it sucks.

Let a woman show her face outside the skin of net and sheet
See her as a human being instead a doll of flesh and meat
See the viens that run her blood and her head that holds a brain
See her as a voice instead of a chest and two long legs
Women and men are both just human life
There is no higher rank between a husband and a wife
We are equal, and together we should stand
We can break down building walls but they cant break through our hands
I offer you my care out of respect - not of doubt
And I worry for you as a loved one not from strength inflicted doubt
I worry for my mother like I worry for my father
I worry for a brother like I worry for my sister

Beat your wife so you feel like a big man
Beat your daughter so you think she understands
Rape your fellow citizen in an already sick society
**** you and your sexist bull**** just keep that away from me

Sexism rings out inside my ears like fired guns
Even when its not present all I want to do is run
I feel the blood go down my face, the bullet cuts right through
You'll see when you open your mind the guns pointed at you
Who says they have to take control cause they were born a man
Who says I have to be so tough, I just dont understand
Sexist words in sexist songs on corprate waste tv
Seeing her as a ****ing post does not appeal to me

sketchyjoe

01-06-2006, 11:39 AM

You do know you can delete posts.

White light/White heat

01-06-2006, 01:51 PM

when will the voting commence?

GermFreeAdolescent

01-06-2006, 06:47 PM

Carry Me Away

Why do we depend on foreign oil?
Can’t we keep jobs on our soil?
Outsource to a far off land
Pushing its people with a gun in hand
We are raping our own beloved land

Carry me away
Carry me off to freedom
Carry me off to the underground
Nobody will ever read this
This wont be found
Nobody will ever care about us
We will be ignored until we are in the ground

The land of the free?
Only listening to the majority
Nobody cares about the minority
Never listening to anything we say
We say “peace” they say “no”
Another war, another scandal, here we go

Carry me away
Carry me off to freedom
Carry me off to the underground
Nobody will ever read this
Nobody will ever care about us

Vaguely I can see
In the future It’s only a bloody you and me
And so comes down the only tree
And so comes down the symbol of life
They open up the flesh at the end of the knife
And the tears stream from a beaten wife
And now I am blind

We are destroying all those years of culture
We are distorting all those days of peace
Playing the guilty as a martyr
And when the thinking man will cease
The money will stop
The guilty will be beaten by the police
The poor will not be able to draw a crop
Our lives only on lease
We will fight until we drop, dry up, and wash away

Carry me away
Carry me off to freedom
Carry me off to the underground
Nobody will ever read this
Nobody will ever care about us
Nobody will ever listen to us
Nobody will ever get to live

We won’t ****ing die
We won’t let it go

My old one sounded really lame and generic so I had to make a few changes. You can decipher the meaning, I'm not going to tell you.

CameoRole

01-06-2006, 06:57 PM

when will the voting commence?

VELVET ****ING UNDERGROUND

Liebensaft

01-06-2006, 07:17 PM

Though... on that note. A song on a whim:

Damn Green Light

My voice is harsh but the message is strong
Lend your voice to mine and send the message along

I cant help but think
as I lay awake in my bed
of the lives we could save
if we worked in a logical way
if we removed all the ****
that makes the poor people pay
and rethought what we think
of the american way

The poor aren't the rich
and the rich aren't the poor
we aren't bridging the gap
we aren't opening doors
the poor are promised profit paths
performing sixty hours in a week
making half of the daily allowance
of a CEO's kid

Their american dream is a dream
They see Gatsby's bullshit green light
They go down in the sixtyfifth round
They never put up a fight
My voice is harsh but the message is strong
Lend your voice to mine and send the message along

The worker clocks in
he works dusk to dawn
the factory churns
And the worker just yawns
The company's red
upgrades its machines
Profits are doubled
Manpower halved
400 men out of work
10 board memebers happy
Free markets at work
What we call a fair system

Their american dream is a dream
They see Gatsby's ****ing green light
They go down in the sixtyfifth round
They never put up a fight
My voice may be harsh but the message is strong
Put your voice next to mine and send the message along

I like it. A lot. The rest of the songs I've read are dumb (no offense to the authors) "anarkee", cliche, assembly line tunes. Yours is well written, and is the best I've seen so far.

guns_of_brixton

01-07-2006, 02:27 PM

I don't really write songs, I just put words that sound cool together.

But I will try to write something and edit it in.

White light/White heat

01-07-2006, 02:33 PM

VELVET ****ING UNDERGROUND
Oh yeah!! you know they rule (apologies for the off-topic-ness)

CameoRole

01-07-2006, 03:45 PM

Oh yeah!! you know they rule (apologies for the off-topic-ness)

WL/WH is my favourite CD ever. It's what rock and roll should be.

Anti-Prefix

01-07-2006, 04:34 PM

We still need more songs. I am going to give it until next Friday. This way we'll have more contenders and it will mean more to the winners. I wanted this thing to be big.

Brain Toad

01-07-2006, 04:37 PM

this is straight up gay
gay as a homo
real gay

Best song yet.

drumindave

01-07-2006, 04:44 PM

You can Say America is done for
Just look at the land
The population is led hand in hand by the man
Why can they conusme
With no fear
Oh wait, their savior Georgy boy is here

When will the rednecks realize the real lies?
When will they get it through their heads their cannon fodder better off dead?
When will they realize the errors of their ways?

They believe when george tells them he knows best
They ain't got no reason to question the rest

If you think it's funny, It's Not
All it is SAD are country is ****ing it self like it's the newest Holocaust Fad

_______________________________________________
I'm not really a lyric writer so heres my crappy attempt.

Liebensaft

01-08-2006, 07:24 PM

Treading Water with Cement Blocks Tied to Your Feet

Well, I love my guns, like lord knows I love my wife.
Fifteen years and four kids - we led a truly blissful life.
I enjoy a hunt on weekends; just me and my sons.
A blistery morning, my rifle, and my boys up at dawn.

I go to church on Sundays and kneel for forgiveness.
I know God's up there listening; he'll forgive me for my sins.
Football and beer follow soon after, an evening spent at home.
My wife goes to bed early. I stay up and drink alone.

An alarm buzz, a shower, Monday has arrived.
I drive to the lumber yard with a booming sense of pride.
I shoot the **** with the boys, having a good laugh.
Twelve hours later I drive home with a sore and angry back.

I open the door to find dinner waiting.
My wife is there talking, but I'm just not listening.
I track mud in across these floors Mary says she washed today.
All she wants to do is talk, and I tell her I've had a long day.

We eat in silence, like every other night.
She tells the kids to leave the room, and I know she wants to fight.
I try my best to stay alert, but can't quite make out the words.
A few minutes pass before I hear her say "divorce".

My feet act before my brain has time to think.
I'm out the door and in my car, mumbling "I need a drink."
In the bar I find myself, surrounded by others like me.
A couple drinks, a round of darts, and I'm back in my SUV.

When I get home, everyone's in bed. Everyone but me.
So I take down pills with a swig of the swill, as I drink myself to sleep.

coheneran

01-08-2006, 07:28 PM

Awesome. It reminds me of McLean's style of writing, except he never got as poh-leati-kal.

just_a_girl

01-08-2006, 09:48 PM

I like it. A lot. The rest of the songs I've read are dumb (no offense to the authors) "anarkee", cliche, assembly line tunes. Yours is well written, and is the best I've seen so far.

Umm.... No offense?

Liebensaft

01-09-2006, 02:24 PM

That's what I said.

Kithkin

01-10-2006, 10:48 PM

Well, that's probably long enough.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-10-2006, 11:42 PM

I'm claiming a spot that will be filled by 4pm est tomorra.

Kithkin

01-12-2006, 11:46 PM

Alright anti-prefix... go ahead and do whatever you were going to do with this.

Biscuit_box

01-13-2006, 05:21 AM

This is just something i came up with 'cause I'm bored and listening to LoC!

America

We have no rights
World infested with blight
War and poverty stricken upon millions
While those in power make billions
They try to hide the truth with bright lights
We can see the lies in the darkness
We are told that the middle east are the terrorists
But we know they are doing the terrorising
US government trying to control the world
Money is power and they’re all whores
A couple of thousand die and they wage war
When millions die of starvation
Polluting the world with ignorance
You heard it all before
Billions spent on bombs to stop the threat
But only America has bombs lined on their belts
If they stopped spending money on things they don’t need to
And helped the poor then there would be no problem
America fights their wars from a distance while the
Poor give their life for what they believe
No political power will give their life for what they believe
They send the poor to fight the poor

coheneran

01-13-2006, 05:25 AM

You are right, we need to take the war to America's door!

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 03:55 PM

I'm claiming a spot that will be filled by 4pm est tomorra.
Nice job.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 05:24 PM

Nice job.

i know rite

Whatever, out of moral obligation:

Variation of the Salad Days

These are the wasted years,
Of our stagnant lives.
We've waited so long,
For our chance to shine.
It's right in front of us
To grasp and to hold
We just gotta grab it
Before we get too old.

They all tell us just whatever we have to do.
And so if we don't like it, make a new.

These can't be wasted years,
Monday will not be the same.
We've got to change some things,
in our zen arcade.

Self sufficience, independence, do it all yourself.
I have hope the kids will rise above it all.

anti_manifesto

01-13-2006, 08:35 PM

A re-write of a song I did with my old band, The Dumblebees.

The More We Think, The Less We Sleep
It's 2 a.m. and I can't sleep (once again) for many different reasons (the change in seasons and the various murders plotted out at dinner meetings). While most are sleeping, I'm wide awake. While many are sleeping, I can't help but be sad for the lives that haven't been lived and the poor, sick, and starving kids in the countries that no one gives a **** about. While most are sleeping, I'm wide awake. While many are sleeping, my thoughts wander to the horrors of empty lives and the attrocities carried out day by day, by clean men in expensive suits.

Rise Me Up

01-13-2006, 08:44 PM

i know rite

Whatever, out of moral obligation:

Variation of the Salad Days

These are the wasted years,
Of our stagnant lives.
We've waited so long,
For our chance to shine.
It's right in front of us
To grasp and to hold
We just gotta grab it
Before we get too old.

They all tell us just whatever we have to do.
And so if we don't like it, make a new.

These can't be wasted years,
Monday will not be the same.
We've got to change some things,
in our zen arcade.

Self sufficience, independence, do it all yourself.
I have hope the kids will rise above it all.

You can sing this perfectly to the tune of Maxwell Murder.

Flagjacket

01-13-2006, 08:48 PM

You can sing this perfectly to the tune of Maxwell Murder.
:eek:

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 08:48 PM

You can sing this perfectly to the tune of Maxwell Murder.

I hope it loses horribly.

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 08:50 PM

I think we should vote soon before people forget this is here.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 08:51 PM

I think we should vote soon before people forget this is here.

Forget what?

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 08:54 PM

Forget what?
This thread, silly.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 08:58 PM

This thread, silly.

What the hell is a this?

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 09:00 PM

What the hell is a this?
Que?

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 09:03 PM

Como?

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 09:04 PM

By the way, I added a title to my song.

It's on the second page.

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 09:04 PM

Como?
There's a pub type place down the street from me called Pizza Como.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 09:12 PM

There's a pub type place down the street from me called Pizza Como.

Mang, I could go for pizza and a beer.

Liebensaft

01-13-2006, 09:14 PM

Mang, I could go for pizza and a beer.
Me too. I just had pizza though. A beer would be nice. A good, frothy kind. Nothing that tastes real bitter. I'd like some hearty alcohol right now.

anti_manifesto

01-13-2006, 09:42 PM

I'd like some hearty alcohol right now.
Oh man, that sounds good right about now.

AIRIC

01-13-2006, 10:19 PM

I'm not much of a drinker, I'd be down with some nice uncut cocaine though.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-13-2006, 10:26 PM

I'm not much of a drinker, I'd be down with some nice uncut cocaine though.

Alcohol is essentially liquid cocaine. It ****s you up the same.

But **** I'd do some coke right now too.

AIRIC

01-13-2006, 11:27 PM

Well, my recent relationship with alchohol isn't very good. I would take some hard addictive drug over it anyday.

coheneran

01-14-2006, 03:32 AM

I'm not much of a drinker, I'd be down with some nice uncut cocaine though.

Inquire with Chris.

AIRIC

01-14-2006, 11:55 AM

Yes yes yes, I know. That was supposed to be the joke.

Liebensaft

01-14-2006, 12:23 PM

Scorch.

echos

01-14-2006, 02:35 PM

If it isn't too late I have an "entry".
I wrote this at school one day...

Gimme!Gimme!Gimme!

Indulge in fear everyday
Erase my mind, it's ok
Show me more murders
more theft
more "reality"

The crime rate's going down
But I just baught 5 more locks, and a gun
These people on the screen,
they're not the same as me
They're criminals not humans,
hearltess, monsters.

For every rapist who goes to jail
there's 10 kids who are hauled off for smokin' crack
The prisons are overflowing
while the real threats walk the streets.
And men in suites still rip me off.

And when no one's looking
more slides under the counter. (end)

It sounds best if it's sung in a sarcastic tone like Biafra's.

Liebensaft

01-14-2006, 02:37 PM

The title sounds vaguely familiar...

echos

01-14-2006, 02:40 PM

The title sounds vaguely familiar...

That's not the title it's part of the song.
(I know it's Black Flag song)
I haven't thought of a title yet.

Liebensaft

01-14-2006, 02:54 PM

Gotcha.

Kithkin

01-22-2006, 02:57 PM

Bump for the hell of it.

Weezerfan_returns

01-22-2006, 04:11 PM

can we submit more than one song? I have two, and i'm really torn as to which one i should use.

Weezerfan_returns

01-22-2006, 04:12 PM

btw, cool idea for a thread, too bad most of the people on here are lazy, and won't submit anything.

Weezerfan_returns

01-23-2006, 12:51 AM

Well, it's been a while, and no one has responded to the thread, so i'm just going to submit both of mine, you guys can pick which one you like more. The first one is sort of funny, the other one isn't, they're both pretty cool.

Smash the State With Style:
(chorus)
burn it down, burn it down
do it with a smile
smash the state, smash the state
smash the state with style

Verse 1
i wanna burn down the white house
in the most fashionable shoes
tear a hole in the empire
silk or sequins, i just can't choose

without the right threads
no one can hear my plea
velvet, fleece, or polyester
best dressed revolutionary

(Chorus)

Verse 2
can't get enough of these new jeans
my love for designer brands
my favorite thing to wear
when bringing down the man

I wear these strapping duds
so the good fight can be fought
voices of a million
well dressed and distraught

(chorus)

(Bridge type thing)
it's time for someone to step up
bring the system to it's knees
do it with high priced outfits,
high heels and accessories

(chorus)

and here's the second one:

Raise Your Voice
my voice will be heard, im not alone singing this song
led us to armageddon, you've led your people wrong

the media's set the stage for the greatest show on earth
the world keeps spinning faster, mankind has gone bezerk

(chorus)
there will never be hope, there will never be a choice (Raise your voice)
you won't escape this hell if..you...can't (raise your voice)
x2

verse 2
they think taht we're alone, they're betting we dont care
they think we're hopeless, think we're living on a prayer

A prayer wont keep you safe, it won't lead you to salvation
the tension's only growing, in this world of frustraion

(chorus)

fatpunk

01-26-2006, 07:15 AM

can we write something about forming a band [title = lets start a band]

sketchyjoe

01-26-2006, 07:47 AM

IT has to be vaguely social.

coheneran

01-26-2006, 08:28 AM

Surely 23/24 entries are enough, Sam?

sketchyjoe

01-26-2006, 08:31 AM

He's got a lot more than I expected him to get.

coheneran

01-26-2006, 08:34 AM

I just want the critiquing and the voting to start.

I just realised you've been here a year more than me and you have like times 5.262158 more posts than me.

EDIT: That's a precise calculation by the way.

sketchyjoe

01-26-2006, 08:47 AM

Yes.

I think Sam's just delaying until he finishes his song.

Liebensaft

01-26-2006, 02:57 PM

Could be. If I had known it'd go this long, I'd take my time and really sit down to write something decent, instead of throwing down slop like I did.

sketchyjoe

01-26-2006, 03:01 PM

There's still time to edit.

Liebensaft

01-26-2006, 03:04 PM

That's true. I may edit a completely different song in place of the current one. An absolute deadline would be nice, so I know just how long I have.

skankingpunkchica

01-26-2006, 07:23 PM

No future

Today we are fed lies everyday in and out we are starving for the truth but were not getting it today and America is getting sick of it. While widows wipe there eyes another soldier dies!
(There's no future for us you created it and made it a mess while you sit in the white house we sit in the street .)
There's no jobs for us the tension is getting high and frustration fills our minds. Poverty is becoming a common thing and your just to blind while familes starve in you enjoy you 3 course meal. It must be nice to have cash spilling from your pockets and help out your suit wearing friends all dressed in black and talking politics.

Thats all I got for now.

Unban Me Says Cameo

01-26-2006, 09:29 PM