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Prophet66
12-22-2005, 07:39 AM
Finished it this morning, there are a few mistakes but im happy with it so far. its kinda short but im gonna work on that a little later. i havent thought up a title yet or any lyrics, im not sure yet how it makes me feel. anywho give it a listen and let me know what ya think

http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=3246503&q=lo

Thanks
luvligirl2005
12-22-2005, 09:25 AM
I liked it. I could almost feel myself singing along to it. That's a good sign which means it's well structured, with the build ups in the right places. The timing could have been a little bit better but for your first original idea, I think you could be going somewhere. Some people seem to drag on with no direction and hook when they first write songs, so I think you could make something out of that one, as I can still remember the 'tune' now. It definately cries out for lyrics and a vocal line though, not necessearily a strong one, as this is one of them songs that 'goes with the flow'. Keep us informed with your progress!

You can check out my songs at www.lpnewmusic.moonfruit.com and clicking on the 'album' tab.
Laetus
12-22-2005, 02:08 PM
I liked it. I could almost feel myself singing along to it. That's a good sign which means it's well structured, with the build ups in the right places. The timing could have been a little bit better but for your first original idea, I think you could be going somewhere. Some people seem to drag on with no direction and hook when they first write songs, so I think you could make something out of that one, as I can still remember the 'tune' now. It definately cries out for lyrics and a vocal line though, not necessearily a strong one, as this is one of them songs that 'goes with the flow'. Keep us informed with your progress!

You can check out my songs at www.lpnewmusic.moonfruit.com and clicking on the 'album' tab.

Bad link.. :p
Try removing the URL tags around it. :)
The Musician
12-22-2005, 09:26 PM
http://www.lpnewmusic.moonfruit.com ;)

I thought the song was really good, I don't know how you could make it better, other than adding vocals. Good job. :thumb:
Prophet66
12-23-2005, 12:40 AM
Sorry it took so long to reply, had to help a friend move his sister into her new apartment, lol. Im glad you liked it, i havent had a chance to work on it anymore today but with the weekend coming up i should be able to!!! :D