Brand New Metal/hardcore Song!

[bryceguitar]

i'm bryce and im 15 years old

ive been playing guitar on and off for about 2 years.
and i just wrote this song called "A Call From Below"

As of right now it only has guitar.

tell me what you think, thanks.

http://www.purevolume.com/beneaththeshadows

[bryceguitar]

any comments?

[neatobassman]

meh. As just a guitar, pretty boring. It might be better with a rhythem guitar, bass, drums and vocals.

[bryceguitar]

yeah im planning to add vox, bass, and drums, but this will be the guitar part for the song

[bryceguitar]

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[HAX]

I thought it was really cool. Gets a bit boring but has potential and has a nice riff. Also, how did you get that guitar sound - I like it :)

[bryceguitar]

thanks man,
its actually a distortion on garageband, which is the program that i use to record with.

[bryceguitar]

anyone else?

[Heal Nations]

pretty cool, what other gear did u use to record?

[bryceguitar]

i didnt even use an amp. i have a mexican made strat
that is plugged into a port which connects to my computer.

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[justinb123]

yup

[thursdaythrice]

can i had vocals to that,im a singer

[bryceguitar]

try it. and then post a link

[thursdaythrice]

alrite,is there any way you can send me the song

[SugarCoatedSour]

that was linear and functional but very uninspired. Sounds like any unsigned metal/hardcore artist and not much worse than most signed artist either. Try using those riffs except start adding a whole wack of interesting stuff to them.

[bryceguitar]

thanks for the advice. and thursdaythrice i will put it as downloadable on puervolume for you.

[bryceguitar]

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[silverburst9]

i thought it was pretty good. maybe try cutting down the one note intro riff part?

[bryceguitar]

thanks for the reply

[bryceguitar]

anyone elseeee

[redrumsixsix6]

Im liking this.......... the intro is maybe alitle to long, but it sounds good! the leads within the song have to be changed up a bit more than they are, they are little to straight forward and repetitive. Sounds like something someone of 2 years of playing would write in a song like this,and i prob coudnt do any better for the lead, just keep working on it and maybe add soem pull-offs to it.

maybe you could cirtique my thread? i would apreciate it: http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=428077

[bryceguitar]

anyone else?

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