2nd Song

[Get Fighted]

I dont know where to begin,
You make me feel so sick,
Ive made mistakes i admit,
But this time you did it

Its been going on for so many years,
Youve made me shed so many tears,
Even my other siblings have joined in,
But this time i will not let you win

YOU GET EVERYTHING,
I GET THE SAME EXCUSE,
I AM TOSSED AWAY,
AND WATCH WHILE YOU ARE PRAISED

You would not believe the anger you have made me feel,
Like there is nothing i can do about it,
And everyone is your side,
Ive grown to hate them all,
And its all because of you

All you do is mock me,
When i talk back you hurt me,
And get away with it,
When i fight back i get the f u c k i n g blame

YOU GET EVERYTHING,
I GET THE SAME EXCUSE,
I AM TOSSED AWAY,
AND WATCH WHILE YOU ARE PRAISED

Sometimes i just give up,
You have destroyed my confidence,
So many f u c k i n g times you tried to put me off,
This time i will do whatever the f u c k i want

I dont care anymore,
The family will soon realise,
You are arrogant, selfish and mean,
And that im not a stupid teen

This is my 2nd Song so please crit :thumb:

And my first song
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?p=10673753#post10673753

[the oddball]

Good job. for your second song to (lol wish i was that good). 9/10.I thought it went pretty good and pretty smoothly and I'm not really sure what else to say. sorry about that but good job

[incoobus]

obviously a song about a pretentious sibling. judging from the tom delong thumb pic, it kinda sounds like a whiny pop song. it has a good premise, a lot of people can probably relate. but i think you need to take more time and find different ways to express your frustration. fu ck can be a very expressive word, but when it gets over used it can just sound lazy. keep writing and you can only get better.
6/10- not bad for a second song ever