Lie (It's Alright)

[Leaves]

I haven't been here with new lyrics in months, but I'm hoping you won't hold that against me. You can always count on me to crit back, I'm good like that.

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Lie (It's Alright)

I'm ashamed
I'm relieved
It's over and you'll leave
I'll let go of hope and keep living
'Cause what I have is not so bad
It's just not what I had wanted

I never thought I had it in me to live a lie
But it's alright
I never thought I had a heart that could watch love die
But it's alright
It's alright

I'm a fool
I'm a farce
I gotta learn my role and play my part
I can't go walking around with a broken heart
And my eyes can't keep getting caught in your traps
So I keep turning away
But I keep turning back

I never thought I had it in me to live a lie
But it's alright
I never thought I had the kind of heart that let love die
But it's alright
I never thought that I would give up without a fight
But it's alright
It's alright

I dreamed I kissed your bruised breast
Don't know what it means but it means something
Life is crazy, isn't it?
Don't know what we're missing but we're missing something
I lost my head and I confessed
Don't know how it changes but it changes something
Life is crazy, isn't it?
I've said too much and now I'm saying nothing

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Thanks,
Leaves

[MidnightHysteria]

I have very mixed feelings on this. On one hand, it seems rather cliché, but I can't really point to any one phrase that's been bludgeoned to death (other than "it's alright"). I also really like the line "And my eyes can't keep getting caught in your traps" except for the starting "and". In fact, in general, I'm not a big fan of starting lines with "and" and neither are many of the other writers on this forum because they make the piece feel scattered (of course, if this is the desired effect, then go ahead and do it).

[DeadReligion]

My favorite part is the part in bold. The rest I agree with MH on.

[Muse_]

Lie (It's Alright)

I'm ashamed
I'm relieved
It's over and you'll leave
I'll let go of hope and keep living
'Cause what I have is not so bad
It's just not what I had wanted
Great start. Its choppy, but thats the way it should be. I like the rhyming of relieved and leave. I also like the theme of settling for less than perfection.

I never thought I had it in me to live a lie
But it's alright
I never thought I had a heart that could watch love die
But it's alright
It's alright
The third line is the weakest for me here. Otherwise, another great stanza. I like the repetition here, it makes the piece stronger.

I'm a fool
I'm a farce
I gotta learn my role and play my part
I can't go walking around with a broken heart
And my eyes can't keep getting caught in your traps
So I keep turning away
But I keep turning back
The first two lines are wonderful. The next is fine, but when paired with the rhyme in the next line, it seems weak. Maybe I'm just being picky, but I believe the fourth line could use some revision.
Eyes getting caught in your traps, makes me picture someone with his eyes glued to a woman's cleavage. Though I'm probably one of the only people that has this image come up when reading this, its easy to take an innocent phrase and have it rub a reader the wrong way.

I never thought I had it in me to live a lie
But it's alright
I never thought I had the kind of heart that let love die
But it's alright
I never thought that I would give up without a fight
But it's alright
It's alright
The repetion again works really well here. I also enjoyed the addition of another though.

I dreamed I kissed your bruised breast
Don't know what it means but it means something
Life is crazy, isn't it?
Don't know what we're missing but we're missing something
I lost my head and I confessed
Don't know how it changes but it changes something
Life is crazy, isn't it?
I've said too much and now I'm saying nothing
Sounds like a conversation with yourself. I liked this stanza the best. Its like the breakdown at the end of a Dispatch song.

Strong song, great work with mechanics, repetition and imagery. I liked the themes, the subject matter, and the way it was all put together.
Excellent work and probably one of the best I've seen on here.
9.2/10