the best song ever written!!! crit for crit

[boyhendoghdy]

Ok, this isn't really the best song ever written. I just claimed that so you would read it. Its a simple song written over a few simple chords, but yeah, tell me what you think. I'll leave the chords too. And yes, it is crit for crit.


"I'm Gonna See You Tonight"

(G G Cadd9 Cadd9)
Wait all day to see your face
When again will I see this lady?
With those great eyes and a smile that shines
I swear to god that I could just die
You put me on top of the world
And I hope that I have you here too
Cause I'd hate to see you unhappy
And nothing will happen while you're with me

(Emin7 Cadd9 G G)
'Cause I'mm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
And I'm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight

(G G Cadd9 Cadd9)
You feel me and I feel you
When will this feeling be complete
From the moment I saw you on that day
I knew no one could take me away
Feeling light like I can fly
No matter what happens I'm touching the sky
On top of a mountain or in the clouds
One way are another I'm singing loud

(Emin7 Cadd9 G G)
'Cause I'm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
And I'm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you
And I'm gonna love you
And I'm gonna love you
And I'm gonna love you to... night (play the chords with each syllable)


Ok, for those who have made it to this point, thanks for reading, crit for crit.

[jimbob2222]

almost sounds emo, sorry =(

[Fender324]

Sounds really good for an acoustic song. Who gives a **** if its "emo". Are ypu gonna not write a song because its emotional?

[k1ckthecat]

That and emo = emotional hardcore, and an acoustic song is in no way hardcore. Don't ever use the term emo again unless you're talking about Still Life or Circle Takes The Square.

[peaveyrules]

How about you all stop using the word mmmkay?

boyhendoghdy, while its not a bad song, I can honestly say it seems far too bland to even critique. It isn't bad, just extremely cliche and bland.

[boyhendoghdy]

Ok, thanks for the crits, but i agree with fender324, i hate emo, and if you know what emo is you obviously wouldn't make that statement. But please everyone, give me some constructive crits. And to peaveyrules, yes, it is very cliche, I know.

[jimbob2222]

lol srry bout that comment.....it really doesnt sound THAT emo it just kinda reminded me of taking back sunday.....idk.....i like the chorus lol

[red n black]

boyhendoghdy: Give that to any pop-singer and it will be a world-wide hit.

If thats good or bad crit, is up to you to judge. ;)

[boyhendoghdy]

to jimbob, yeah its ok, i didn't really take it into offense that much, i just really don't like emo

to red n black, thanks alot, lol

but if someone could try to break the song apart and give me your opinion that would be awsome

[zeppelin_freak07]

nothing is wrong with emo. taking back sunday is a good band. thats one of the beauties of music and rock is that its like a theropy to get your emotions out. i dont listen to much emo. im more of a classic rock guy, but if that is your style, go for it. to tell you the truth it sounded good to me. it kinda reminds me of the girl i like right now, which is good about music, knowing other peopl feel the same way you do. keep it up dude, you could improve a little bit, but for the most part, pretty good kid!

[TojesDolan]

'Cause I'mm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
And I'm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
Most unsipired, lacking chorus ever. Almost Hillary Duffish. I'll give you a proper one later. I feel a tad bit tired at the moment.

[DeadReligion]

Lol, you said it Tojes.

[njdhockey]

I'm still a newbie at this but I'll offer my opinion. Verses are good but the chorus needs work.

"(Emin7 Cadd9 G G)
'Cause I'mm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
And I'm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight"

I think it would be cool like this:
"(Emin7 Cadd9 G G)
'Cause I'mm gonna see you tonight
And I'm gonna love you tonight
And I'm gonna see you tonight
tonight____ tonight____" (___=hold word when singing)

If my version sucks which some people will probably say it does then use something else, like a more experienced users version. I'm just trying to help out and learn at the same time. Please crit my lyrics "Flaw" Flaw (http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=408713)

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Taking Back Sunday isn't an emo band. Neither is Fall Out Boy, or Hawthorne Heights, or My Chemical Romance, or The Used, or Matchbook Romance, or Funeral For a Friend, or Dashboard Confessional, or Something Corporate, or Linkin Park, or Atreyu.

[Arrakakaka]

Taking Back Sunday isn't an emo band. Neither is Fall Out Boy, or Hawthorne Heights, or My Chemical Romance, or The Used, or Matchbook Romance, or Funeral For a Friend, or Dashboard Confessional, or Something Corporate, or Linkin Park, or Atreyu.
Thank you. Finally..

[SubtleDagger]

Banned for a day.

I believe I have a rule about mentioning emo if you don't know what you're talking about.

At least some of you tried to set him straight.

[Walrus]

thats a poor attempt boyhendogdhy back to the drawing board - seriously

[Walrus]

thats poor i my opinion some thrashy lyrics - the walrus has spoken