Artificial Affection

[Broken String]

Please crit-I will crit yours. Peace

What good can come from this
Senseless, meaningless relationship?
It was put together
On a whim of affection.

But no more now is there any love.
Over me, this is way above.
I have to go and live my life,
free from sin and free from strife.

We had a good run, you and I,
But everyday is last night's alibi.
How did all of this come to be?
What foreshadowing didn't we see?

They put us together and pulled us apart.
We had fun and played the part.
But I'm sick of being this way
and I have to go away.

I have to think this through
if this lost love may be worth saving.
'Cuz girl you really got me feeling blue.
...to me their opinions mean nothing.

They put us together,
They pulled us apart.
Oh how we played the part.
But now it's time to move on...

[DeadReligion]

Way too straight forward, relationship songs shouldn't be done that way, it sounds whiney and stupid. You did a good job of writing it, the title was good, but doing it so straight forward isn't a good idea. 5/10

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=404870

[MidnightHysteria]

I must say, I'm quite sick of hearing life and strife rhymed (not your fault, you're just the latest in a far-too-long line). That turned me off to the rest of it. I agree with DeadReligion's 5/10.

[ShakeyAir]

Please crit-I will crit yours. Peace

We had a good run, you and I,
But everyday is last night's alibi.


Those lines are awesome, the rest is really boring.