Challenge 96 - Voting

[Disco Dragon]

If you're happy and you know it.....shut the f*ck up and vote.


My lazy votes. (Actually just really busy at work right now....meh):

silenceevolves - 4th
Dancin’ Man - 1st
A Perfect Sonnet - 5th
Lowridenn - 2nd
xKONRADx - 8th
RunAmokRampant - 6th
Broken String - 10th
TojesDoLan - 13th
Crimsonpunk - 14th
ATC - 7th
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - 9th
StuP - 11th
LeeRoberts - 12th
Benjamin Lee South - 3rd

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

If I was happy and I knew it I wouldn't cut my wrists and black my eyes.

silenceevolves 1
Dancin’ Man 4
A Perfect Sonnet
Lowridenn 9
xKONRADx 10
RunAmokRampant 2
Broken String 11
Disco Dragon 3
TojesDoLan 5
Crimsonpunk 13
ATC 6
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE 7
StuP 14
LeeRoberts 12
Benjamin Lee South 8

[xKONRADx]

6-silenceevolves- its reasonable, revise repetition of 'differences'
8-Dancin’ Man- nice idea, 'rubble' line goes unfinnished
2-A Perfect Sonnet- unconventional, monumental? i cant think of changes...
9-Lowridenn- it was written well enough, but... lameish?
0-xKONRADx- FATALITY
7-RunAmokRampant- drawn out
12-Broken String- nice start....
3-Disco Dragon- less style near the end, but i like it alot
10-TojesDoLan- hmm, ok.
13-Crimsonpunk- nice effort?
1-ATC- ****ing right
4-ITRIEDVOODOOONCE- short, but nice
11-StuP- meh
14-LeeRoberts- no.
5-Benjamin Lee South- a little sick but well written

[Lowridenn]

1 silenceevolves
3 Dancin’ Man
2 A Perfect Sonnet
X Lowridenn
13 xKONRADx
4 RunAmokRampant
12 Broken String
11 Disco Dragon
5 TojesDoLan
14 Crimsonpunk
9 ATC
10 ITRIEDVOODOOONCE
7 StuP
6 LeeRoberts
8 Benjamin Lee South

[RunAmokRampant]

Im gonna be pretty busy this week with exam preparation and all so I don't think I have the time or the effort at the moment to give everyone at least a half decent crit. But if you ask for one I'll reply.


silenceevolves 6th
Dancin’ Man 2nd
A Perfect Sonnet 3rd
Lowridenn 7th
xKONRADx 8th
Broken String 11th
Disco Dragon 4th
TojesDoLan 9th
Crimsonpunk 14th
ATC 1st
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE 12th
StuP 10th
LeeRoberts 5th
Benjamin Lee South 13th

[Dancin' Man]

I was happy and knew it... then I joined MX
silenceevolves - I wrote a good crit but lost it. Basically good, but tighten it up. Certain lines I disliked very much. 3
Dancin

[B]****

I went in to edit my votes and accidentally deleted most of them. In the end it was to give Sonnet 2nd and ATC 1st. Those are the top two right now anyway. I think I gave Lowridenn 3rd.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

I would be happy and know it...... if i could think of something witty to say
silenceevolves - 4
Dancin’ Man - 6
A Perfect Sonnet - 5
Lowridenn - 8
xKONRADx - 12
RunAmokRampant - 2
Broken String - 10
Disco Dragon - 6
TojesDoLan - 3
Crimsonpunk - 14
ATC - 1
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - AMAZING!!!!
StuP - 13
LeeRoberts - 9
Benjamin Lee South - 11

[Crimsonpunk]

The more knowledge I gain the less happy I become

silenceevolves
Dancin’ Man
A Perfect Sonnet - 1st
Lowridenn - 4th
xKONRADx
RunAmokRampant - 2nd
Broken String
Disco Dragon - 3rd
TojesDoLan - 5th
Crimsonpunk
ATC
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE
StuP
LeeRoberts
Benjamin Lee South

[TojesDolan]

That song was in the Metallica Icon circle-jerk fest on MTV. yeah. :D

silenceevolves 2
Dancin’ Man 6
A Perfect Sonnet 1
Lowridenn 3
xKONRADx 7
RunAmokRampant 4
Broken String 9
Disco Dragon 8
=)
Crimsonpunk 12
ATC 5
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE 10
StuP 11
LeeRoberts 13
Benjamin Lee South 14

Maybe the voting was a little rushed. Just maybe.

[Broken String]

silenceevolves 1
Dancin’ Man 2
A Perfect Sonnet 3
Lowridenn 4
xKONRADx 5
RunAmokRampant
Disco Dragon
TojesDoLan
StuP
Crimsonpunk
ATC
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE
LeeRoberts
Benjamin Lee South

[ATC]

*clap*

silenceevolves - 3This has a lot of potential. Ideas go unexplored sometimes but its pretty good. ps: what is adumbration? I refuse to feel stupid for not knowing that.
Dancin’ Man - 2. This is your best in quite awhile. The industrial feel is captured quite well.
A Perfect Sonnet -5. I'm torn between genuinely loving some of this and hating other parts.
Lowridenn -11. Didn't quite jump out at me though its not a bad job at all. Just seemed like a collage of a lot of songs.
xKONRADx - 8. I like the puns and the catchiness in this though as words on a page, the repitition was too immediate.
RunAmokRampant - 6. You really must experiment with line length a little more. On first read, its hard to get through your work though I end up liking it after.
Broken String- 13. I don't doubt it working musically, but the lyrics feel like an afterthought. Also, the phrase public enemy is jarring to me.
Disco Dragon -4. Overrhymed in parts. Decent otherwise.
TojesDoLan- 12. You need to focus. You're reaching on this one. Also, not every line must be a sentence by itself. Taking out 'to' and 'and' and similar words is allowed if it helps flow.
Crimsonpunk - 14. You wrote a mediocre song and had the gall to announce it as a 15 minute attempt. Self-deprecation or arrogance, whatever it may be, it makes me judge you harshly. The imagery is hackneyed and the theme has been explored far too much in any case.
ATC - L'etat. C'est moi.
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - 10. I shall get back to you. This score subject to change.
StuP - 9. This, again, has potential. I'd like this a lot more without stanza 2.
LeeRoberts - 7. I like the simple connection I can feel with this.
Benjamin Lee South - 1. The title isn't all that. However, the poem is awesome. A wee bit of tightening and it's magical.

[StuP]

silenceevolves - 5th
Dancin’ Man - 9th
A Perfect Sonnet - 4th
Lowridenn - 1st
xKONRADx - 8th
RunAmokRampant - 2nd
Broken String - 11th
Disco Dragon - 7th
TojesDoLan - 14th
Crimsonpunk - 13th
ATC - 3rd
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - 10th
LeeRoberts - 12th
Benjamin Lee South - 6th

[silenceevolves]

****. I wasn't done with my song.

Oh well.

silenceevolves
Dancin’ Man - 2
A Perfect Sonnet - 5
Lowridenn - 3
xKONRADx - 7
RunAmokRampant - 4
Broken String - 13
Disco Dragon - 1
TojesDoLan - 11
Crimsonpunk - 14
ATC - 6
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - 8
StuP - 9
LeeRoberts - 12
Benjamin Lee South - 10

[Benjamin Lee South]

silenceevolves - 8. I am not sure as to what I think of this.
Dancin’ Man - 2. You, my friend........are very talented.
A Perfect Sonnet -3. I do believe this is beautiful.
Lowridenn - 7 Not so bad, but not my forte. Some of it is just a beautiful portrayal of nostalgia, and some is just blah.
xKONRADx - 5 Great. Aside from the "cha" slang.
RunAmokRampant -4 Very good job.
Broken String- 14 I do not dig.
Disco Dragon -12 This rhyme scheme is sketchy. It kind of destroyed it for me. You shouldn't rhyme, unless you know you can rhyme well.
TojesDoLan- 10 Not the worst, not the best.
Crimsonpunk - 13 This is either a failed attempt at a death metal song, or.........I do not even know.
ATC - 1. This sort of writing is rare. It brings me to a better place, knowing someone can write so well.
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE -11 I like the idea you're getting at, well......the lyrics are a little too mediocre.
StuP - 6 This is not bad at all. I would like to aknowledge, that this has potential for greatness.
LeeRoberts - 9. Again, the rhyming isn't amazing. Other than that, it's a good one.
Benjamin Lee South

[drumindave]

silenceevolves-11
Dancin’ Man -1 I really like the concepts you used.
A Perfect Sonnet 4 It is like a fairy tail or something in someones mind, it was interesting.
Lowridenn - 12 It felt to me like you were trying to write this, just didn't flow for me.
xKONRADx -2 That was great.
RunAmokRampant -8
Broken String -3
TojesDoLan -9
Crimsonpunk -6
ATC -5
ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - 7
StuP -10
LeeRoberts -13
Benjamin Lee South -14