Challenge 96 - Replies

[SubtleDagger]

No rhyming "treason" with "reason".

Thanks.

[EmergencyRoom]

No rhyming "treason" with "reason".

Thanks.

Kasabian did it and got a UK hit:-/

[SubtleDagger]

Kasabian did it and got a UK hit:-/
Hits suck.

[EmergencyRoom]

Hits suck.

Hence the :-/

[SubtleDagger]

Oh, also the UK sucks.

[Dancin' Man]

Now we're talking.

I promise to do less badly this time.

[EmergencyRoom]

Oh, also the UK sucks.

Care to elaborate?

[SubtleDagger]

Care to elaborate?
Not really. It just kind of sucks.

[EmergencyRoom]

Not really. It just kind of sucks.

Like a hoover or a cheap 40 year-old prostitute?

[SubtleDagger]

I'll give a shot...

but I am a newb here, so when/where do I enter my song?
Whenever you want within the next week, in the entries thread.

[Broken String]

Thank you :thumb:

[SubtleDagger]

No problem, just be sure to use the word and keep regular conversing in here.

[Broken String]

Gotcha...

I like your avatar :D

[Dancin' Man]

He's the queen of France.

What is the url for that full thing? I figure I ould google family life network + Queen of France but then I might end up with gay **** so I'm not willing to risk it.

[DFelon204409]

I resent that....

btw ya i figured that out and i decided to make that a secondary goal and work on becoming a producer. I guess I'm batter at that cuz I have a label. Funny how things turn out.

Dude, you're like 14. Only label you have is the one your mommy put on your sweatshirts in case you lose them while riding the big yellow bus.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

He's the queen of France.

What is the url for that full thing? I figure I ould google family life network + Queen of France but then I might end up with gay **** so I'm not willing to risk it.

I haven't been able to find a link to get the full movie of Rejected yet.

[pixiesfanyo]

Dude, you're like 14. Only label you have is the one your mommy put on your sweatshirts in case you lose them while riding the big yellow bus.

Hey, your show needs more HXC.

[DFelon204409]

Hey, I had guests and I let them pick out crap by the Dandy Warhols and Willie Nelson. Chill about it.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

C00l w3rd.

[SubtleDagger]

R3411y?

[pixiesfanyo]

Hey, I had guests and I let them pick out crap by the Dandy Warhols and Willie Nelson. Chill about it.

ah, so they had vaginas.

[Dancin' Man]

dfelon gotz sum... loaloll

Seeing Ed Gein in 15 days. Yeeha.

[xKONRADx]

You guys are lame.

[ATC]

What's horribly lame is that Pelican have dropped out of the Opeth tour and now I'm stuck having to watch an unknown local band called the S.T.R.E.E.T.S.

[SubtleDagger]

Pelican's good, Opeth blows. I don't blame them.

[xKONRADx]

No rhyming "treason" with "reason".

Thanks.

.....

I know you all hate these 15 minute attemps, but here goes

Give me a disease and a reason
And I'll inject without first thinking
Cataclysmic seizures slowly sinking
You can't complete what's already deceased

My options end at treason
Can't betray, when you hold no loyalty
Hung up and bleed like spoiled meat
You can't entomb what's already exhumed

New life for the recently deceased
New breath for the dead and buried

i just LOVE mx.

[TojesDolan]

So I wrote about prostitutes.

yeah.

[ATC]

So I wrote about prostitutes.

yeah.

The next step is prosthetic limbs.

[TojesDolan]

The next step is prosthetic limbs.
I don't know, I've been voted the worst in the two LC's I've entered.

Maybe that's a pointer for me to just quit.

[ATC]

I don't know, I've been voted the worst in the two LC's I've entered.

Maybe that's a pointer for me to just quit.

Pfft, long as you show a decent learning curve, it's all good. Third time's the charm, after all. I'll read your earlier works in an about an hour and see what you need to change, right after dinner. I'm a hungry hungry person right now.

[TojesDolan]

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=400426

You can check my latest "official" poem/song.

It's very basic, but I like it.

[ATC]

Nothing wrong with simplicity in anything. Simple by itself does not mean bad.

I've critted it. Hope it helps.

[Dancin' Man]

Buffalo '66 is possibly the best movie ever because of these two passages of dialogue...

Billy to Goon/Rocky: "You know why they call you Goon? Because you're retarded. And you're ugly. You're an ugly retard. And they call you Goon because you're ugly and retarded. And you'll always be Goon... Goon, Goon, Goon. And that's what I'm gonna call you for the rest of your life, is Goon. Goon, Goon, Goon, Goon, okay? So **** you."

Billy: "What are you doin' ?"
Layla: "What ?"
Billy: "Don't touch me."
Layla: "What do you mean, ''Don't touch me'' ?"
Billy: "We're supposed to be husband and wife."
Layla: "l'm just tryin' to make it look good."
Billy: "We're the couple that doesn't touch one another. We like each other a lot, and we span time together. We just don't touch each other, all right ?"

To Tojes - Just do what I did. Never actually get any better at writing, just stay mediocre and only come back about 4 times every 40 challenges

[DFelon204409]

The next step is prosthetic limbs.

No need.

www.ratemystump.com (http://www.ratemystump.com)

[ATC]

No need.

www.ratemystump.com (http://www.ratemystump.com)

I laughed at all those jokes. I think I'm going to hell now.

[Dancin' Man]

HAHHAAHah.....

/new homepage

[Crimsonpunk]

Oh, also the UK sucks.


Whose language do you think your abusing??

[SubtleDagger]

Whose language do you think your abusing??
What exactly are you trying to say about my abusing?

Nice self-own there.

[Crimsonpunk]

What exactly are you trying to say about my abusing?

Nice self-own there.

So what you actualy mean is, 'I know you are, but what am I'
I could predict you saying that a mile off, which is why i'm one step ahead.
The point still stands, your all just immigrated versions of us, who went over, killed all the indians with sneaky tricks, and settled down in front of the tv for the next hundred or so years.

No offence to you though, sir...

[Crimsonpunk]

Originally Posted by sd
No rhyming "treason" with "reason".

Thanks.



.....


Quote:
Originally Posted by newb
I know you all hate these 15 minute attemps, but here goes

Give me a disease and a reasonAnd I'll inject without first thinking
Cataclysmic seizures slowly sinking
You can't complete what's already deceased

My options end at treason
Can't betray, when you hold no loyalty
Hung up and bleed like spoiled meat
You can't entomb what's already exhumed

New life for the recently deceased
New breath for the dead and buried




i just LOVE mx
And I'm partial to your mother, but you don't hear me bitchin' about it
Good it isn't a rhyme then, isn't it, jesus...

I'm not even gonna bother with the word 'newb', because all that means to me is that my face isn't glued to my ****ing monitor by my own feces 24/7, as I jack off to pictures of circuit boarding..
I am calm..

[SubtleDagger]

So what you actualy mean is, 'I know you are, but what am I'
I could predict you saying that a mile off, which is why i'm one step ahead.
The point still stands, your all just immigrated versions of us, who went over, killed all the indians with sneaky tricks, and settled down in front of the tv for the next hundred or so years.

No offence to you though, sir...
Oh, and don't forget that we also beat the hell out of your army.
just LOVE mx
And I'm partial to your mother, but you don't hear me bitchin' about it
Good it isn't a rhyme then, isn't it, jesus...

I'm not even gonna bother with the word 'newb', because all that means to me is that my face isn't glued to my ****ing monitor by my own feces 24/7, as I jack off to pictures of circuit boarding..
I am calm..
Somebody sort of already pointed that song out.

[Dancin' Man]

Crimsonpunk is my favorite.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Ah darn, I should've called him. Now I have to find a new favorite.

[Crimsonpunk]

Please, theres plently of crimson to go around....

[Crimsonpunk]

Question:

Do I need to vote when it comes to voting??

[SubtleDagger]

Question:

Do I need to vote when it comes to voting??
If you entered, you have to vote.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

whens this one over?

[SubtleDagger]

Tomorrow night.

[Dancin' Man]

Burt, (and anyone else I suppose) what do you think about Into the Moat?

I just wrote my first college essay. It's really bad.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

Into the Moat is pretty **** amazing, heard of Paria? they is sweet to.

And im sorry about your essay.

[SubtleDagger]

They are very good.

[Dancin' Man]

I've got Paria on my soulseek wishlist because I hate buying anything then finding out I don't like it. Like what happened with Coalesce. That mae me really angry.

Burt - Crossfire was never that cool.

[EmergencyRoom]

Due to technical difficulties i might not be able to post my entry. Basically, my computer sucks at the minute. :angry:

[pixiesfanyo]

They are very good.

CROSSFIREEE

[Dancin' Man]

Crossfire is all about the commercials. The game was pretty lame.

[Crimsonpunk]

Between the crossfire and the dancin' dude, i'm getting a headache..

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

I never actually played Crossfire.

[Dancin' Man]

Now Mousetrap was a real game.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Indeed. "GET THE CHEESE BEFORE ALL THE OTHER MICE, BUT WATCH OUT!"

[Crimsonpunk]

I think your forgetting monopoly, now that game must of caused more break-ups, arguments and murders than any other game in history. I myself have killed three people over monopoly.

[ATC]

I've killed more people playing Pictionary than any other game.

'Dammit, that's not a turkey, that's a turnip'. *strangle*

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

ive killed about 7 of my liar friends playing go fish
**** straight they were hiding cards.

[SubtleDagger]

Crossfire is all about the commercials. The game was pretty lame.
I know. I had the game.

It's sort of like the power glove.

It's so bad.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

ahh snap, horse/megaman quotes never get old
you bubonic retard

[DFelon204409]

FREE MOVIE - Cinephiles will be screening "In the Realms of a
the Unreal," a documentary by Jessica Yu about the work of
legendary outsider artist, Henry Darger. This Friday, Oct.
14th at 5:30 and 11pm. Images Cinema. Free for Williams
students. For more info, check out:
http://www.realmsoftheunreal.com/


http://www.williams.edu/go/messages/M20051012-008-06vlb.ht.html

How about that Burt. I'm definitely going.

[pixiesfanyo]

ahh snap, horse/megaman quotes never get old
you bubonic retard

By Megaman do you mean The Wizard?

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

jigga say wha? Didn't bother to find the exact source of the quote, but figured it was from megaman tv show.

[pixiesfanyo]

jigga say wha? Didn't bother to find the exact source of the quote, but figured it was from megaman tv show.

It's from the Wizard.

Nintendo movie.

You're stupid.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

The one where the kid goes to a Super Mario Bros. competition?

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

It's from the Wizard.

Nintendo movie.

You're stupid.

i may be stupid, yes

but i got half the thing

so im half stupid

[TojesDolan]

Do you mean that crazy TV show with the kid that had a belt buckle like-nintendo-controller? That was cool.

He had super jump if he pressed A.

[SubtleDagger]

How about that Burt. I'm definitely going.
Yeah, I knew about the movie and have already seen it. It's very good, though it kind of doesn't focus on Darger's life enough.

You should tell people about my stuff.

[ATC]

Voting thread?

[Dancin' Man]

Rock on for Benjamin and songs about aliens.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

I think I'm worse off for having read that. Much worse.

[Crimsonpunk]

Being an idiot, I don't know how to vote, I take it I just post the names and add the orders later, yeah??

[RunAmokRampant]

Read the rules mate.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Give a small critique and then a number ranking. Don't vote for yourself.

[Dancin' Man]

ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - Should I bother checking out From a Second Story Window? Your name is the only song I heard and I can't decide if I like it or not.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Anyone have any Iron and Wine CD's/EP's other than Our Endless Numbered Days? I'll trade over AIM, 2300 songs.

[Crimsonpunk]

Runamokrampant,
I think I deserve a small crit for being voted last, just because i'm not a fan of over poetic bullshit

[Dancin' Man]

treasonreason

I'd like one too please.

Sonnet - No but I heard them once through forced listening. I think I'll check them out further.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Runamokrampant,
I think I deserve a small crit for being voted last, just because i'm not a fan of over poetic bullpoop

Lowest place is dropped, and I've already decided I'm not voting you last.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

ITRIEDVOODOOONCE - Should I bother checking out From a Second Story Window? Your name is the only song I heard and I can't decide if I like it or not.

well i seem to love that song and the rest are more or less the same, but that song is kinda their epic. Listen to how london got its fog, or the challenge of caring for a better understanding of their average.

[DFelon204409]

http://www.sputnikmusic.com/album.php?reviewid=3947

Thrice - Vheissu Review

[xKONRADx]

Anyone have any Iron and Wine CD's/EP's other than Our Endless Numbered Days? I'll trade over AIM, 2300 songs.
i have the creek drank the cradle, and some other random stuff
talk to metaliq, he gave it all to me

[RunAmokRampant]

http://www.sputnikmusic.com/album.php?reviewid=3947

Thrice - Vheissu Review

Thats gotta be the longest review I've ever read. I heard the first four Thrice songs off their new album from their myspace page and thought it would be a good album worthy of my collection, so I am going to buy it as soon as I see it. :thumb:

[RunAmokRampant]

Crimsonpunk - Well since you've already condemned this piece by saying you only spent 15 minutes on it which reveals the minimal effort made. The piece overall lacked substance and there is no lyrical flair to it and words such as "Cataclysmic seizures" make it bland. The figurative language which is used doesn't seem to elicit any strong images in my mind due to the blandness. Im sorry but this I dislike and maybe you should rework the entry more and add to it and make it better instead just slapping something together. And obviously you can tell I hate 15 minute attempts.

Dancin Man - I'll do your's later when I have time.

[Dancin' Man]

DFelon - Thrice have released some fairly awful songs with a real nu-metal touch to them. Does this album do that from the most un-biased mouth you have.

[DFelon204409]

If you feel that about them then a) you'll feel that way again and b) I think less of you. Deftones are nu-metal, but they're not, but they're also amazing.

[Crimsonpunk]

Hmmm. That sounds pretty fair to me, touche to you, sir.
I think we should have 'freestyle lyrical challenges' Where everyone is given five or ten minutes to come up with a piece, of course, there would be no way of telling whether people were cheating, Damn!

[DFelon204409]

That'd be impossible because nobody could sync up the time. Maybe if two mxers had freestyle IMing versus each other where it recorded the IM times. That'd be legit. Then you could copy and paste into a thread.

[Dancin' Man]

when I say nu-metal, I'm thinking of the song Sillhouette in particular.

[IanEye]

Has anyone actually particapated in a game of Monopoly which came to a complete and correct ending?

[DFelon204409]

when I say nu-metal, I'm thinking of the song Sillhouette in particular.

That's what I thought for the first verse. Did you bother to listen to the beautiful ambient section where the guitars and bass are doing this awesome interwoven movement. Did you bother to read the A-grade lyrics? Did you bother to count the awesome time signature changes? That song is anything but boring.

[Dancin' Man]

OK, I listened again and it's a good song, except for the nu-metal part. They're a catchy band is for sure, but somethign about them annoys me, like they could do it so much better if they wanted to.

[xKONRADx]

OK, I listened again and it's a good song, except for the nu-metal part. They're a catchy band is for sure, but somethign about them annoys me, like they could do it so much better if they wanted to.
lol, thats what i was going to say about your mom.

[Dancin' Man]

u r so clever... she could too. I don't know, they just seem like they are better songwriters than they let themselves be. I just have a thing against hearing certain parts too many times in a song, especially when it's the worst part of a song. Also, I didn't judge them lyrically because I amde a comment about the music and the music and words are different. They are both important, but remain seperate entities in a song.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Illusion of Safety still schools the new album, hard.

[RunAmokRampant]

Hmm I find it hard to compare IOS with the new one. Totally different approach IMO. I dig the new album. I find it annoying when people say 'older stuff is much better' like they know the bands music better than the band itself. It's all a matter of opinion but I wish people will find better things to support their opinion.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

You are total misinterpreting my statement. I dislike the direction Thrice started heading when I heard AITA. Therefore, this new album wasn't that great to me either. I'm not saying I dislike it, but I prefer the older Thrice to the newer any day.

[DFelon204409]

Hmm I find it hard to compare IOS with the new one. Totally different approach IMO. I dig the new album. I find it annoying when people say 'older stuff is much better' like they know the bands music better than the band itself. It's all a matter of opinion but I wish people will find better things to support their opinion.

Like a massive review? I'm pretty sure my opinion is pretty well supported and that I know their music as well as any fan can.

[xKONRADx]

This is the thing, repetition, formulation and any set boundaries will eventually kill a band. even if we all agree that the new album isnt as good as previous ones, that doesnt mean they made a mistake.

[DFelon204409]

Well, you don't have to make a new album that's good in the same way as an old album but I'd like to see bands live up to their old albums' quality. I don't know how I'd rank their stuff. For me IOS is obviously first tier. Then the next area after that is ambiguous. Vheissu is probably not their worst album but I definitely enjoy it the least, which still means I love it because Thrice to me have not written even a B+ album yet. They're still above 90% in my book.

[ATC]

http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=404509

Any crits will result in my eternal undying adoration.

[Dancin' Man]

voting is fun. I need a metal band, preferably one of these newer tech metal/grind-core bands that have exceptionally good lyrics. I'm thinking DEP is alright, but there must be something better. CTTS isn't as heavy or technical as what I want.

[ATC]

I need a trip-hop meets adult contemporary full-time band. I find I enjoy this relatively obscure genre quite a bit. I've only done one song within the genre but it was so much fun. A girl in my Songwriting class tried it out and it inspired me. I'm so happy. I need to drink less Extra sugar iced tea.

[xKONRADx]

you hate it? thats a little harsh. and how do i stereotype rap? sorry about the comments about your mom, if you had spent some time in this forum, youd see that there is alot of insulting without actual intent to hurt feelings. im sorry if i hurt yours. *** ****er. see, just like that. no harm. the thing is, i think you should apologize to crimson punk. i mean if you hate my song, and didnt even bother to write anything for his, that must be really hard on him. we all love mx, cant we just love each other?

[Dancin' Man]

hmph... I suppose. Basically, I think that rap doesn't need to be writtena s it is said, just like I don't need to write out my lyrics BLASSRHT FAHAHEKEHEEHCKKHANKDFSHC
\SAJDKNCNBBALLLARGGGASBNSJ
just because they go into grind songs. Also, I disliked your repetition and overall found it poorly written. It is nothing personal at all because I've seen you write good stuff. This just wasn't it. Also, I don't think Crimson Punk's song deserves critique given his arrogance/confidence about the time he spent on it. I'm only willing to put in the same relative effort of critiquing as I think the writer put in. That isn;t to say a 15 minute song can;t be the best, but I doubt that someone could write a first place song in 15 minutes. **** rider.

[xKONRADx]

yes. thanks for the explanation and actually i think i agree with you on some level. however i think your grind lyrics analogy isnt perfect. its more like when someone writes a song and then puts the backup vocals in parenthesis. bastards.

[Dancin' Man]

Yeah, but sometimes for formatting and simply the way they are meant to be read, parentheses make sense so I don't think either of us has had a good analogy yet. Writing country lyrics with a built in southern twang?

[xKONRADx]

i think the problem with writing country lyrics is the writing... and the country. hm.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

I tried out for a tech metal band (vocals). Mine are sort of closer towards a more mainstream hardcore vocal (think, Beloved, but higher). Maybe it will work into something cool. I'll bring the melody up into their breakdowns.

Needless to say, the bassist who was doing vocals was not cutting it.

[cytoplasmicglob]

eh, i'm working on noise IDM right now.

ah, to enter next week, or not to enter next week? That is the question.

[cytoplasmicglob]

Has anyone actually particapated in a game of Monopoly which came to a complete and correct ending?

yessiree.

[DFelon204409]

Do it.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Voting closes tonight?

[Disco Dragon]

Hey, just so you guys know, my song was meant to be a dedication in the form of a poem to my nephew, Mason, who was born premature a couple months ago. I thought that the rhyming worked well, but that's probably because I was involved in the situation, and you guys weren't. And as far as it fitting with music, that wasn't my primary intention.

And on a sidenote, has anyone ever heard of the band The Zutons? Just picked up their album and its glorious. I highly recommend them.

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

to dancin man, here are some good tech metal/grind bands (even though some are small and have bad quality)

www.myspace.com/theacaciastrain
http://www.myspace.com/shatonaturtle
http://www.myspace.com/jobforacowboy

[ITRIEDVOODOOONCE]

to dancin man, here are some good tech metal/grind bands (even though some are small and have bad quality)

www.myspace.com/theacaciastrain
http://www.myspace.com/shatonaturtle
http://www.myspace.com/jobforacowboy

[Dancin' Man]

Hey, just so you guys know, my song was meant to be a dedication in the form of a poem to my nephew, Mason, who was born premature a couple months ago. I thought that the rhyming worked well, but that's probably because I was involved in the situation, and you guys weren't. And as far as it fitting with music, that wasn't my primary intention.

And on a sidenote, has anyone ever heard of the band The Zutons? Just picked up their album and its glorious. I highly recommend them.

Mason? One of my friends older sister just had a baby named Mason about 8 months ago I think. They call him the Moose. She just got married to the father. She was 19 when she had the baby. I swear she's not trashy though, she's really super cool and has dreads.

[Dancin' Man]

to dancin man, here are some good tech metal/grind bands (even though some are small and have bad quality)

www.myspace.com/theacaciastrain
http://www.myspace.com/shatonaturtle
http://www.myspace.com/jobforacowboy

I've heard of the acacia strain but never checked them out. I'll get on this. Have you heard The Concubine? Oh, Shaton a turtle is Ion Dissonance. I was listening to them in the car today. The Firl Next Door is always screaming is such a good song.

ATC - you gave out two 5's and 2 2's but no 1 or 14.

[ATC]

I was working on a Songwriting guide which I figured might help a few people out. Here's a link. If you guys have anything to add, feel free. Oh, and similarly if you think any of the exercises prescribed are crap or concepts are.
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=405163

edit: fixed my votes. Thanks, Pete.

[Dancin' Man]

I like the idea of writing excersizes better than the lyric game fing.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

With the exception of the first 4 songs, and maybe 2 more (Music Box and Like Moths to the Flame), I'm liking the new Thrice album...

Well, half of it at least.

[Disco Dragon]

We should probably close the voting thread pretty soon. So everyone make you sure you get your final rankings up as soon as possible.

[RunAmokRampant]

voting should be closed now

[TojesDolan]

I haven't seen Burt log on lately, probably he's not around, so It'll be open for a while. Until he returns.

[DFelon204409]

Or until I close it right now. Somebody calc the votes.

[Dancin' Man]

As far as I know ATC won with Sonnet in 2nd. Please accept my votes because my originals were right. if someone still has the ability to win after my votes that I didn't rank, tell me and I'll give them a ranking of 4th place.

[DFelon204409]

I'll review your votes and see if they're legit.

Benjamin Lee South, I was impressed with the way you contrasted fantastical imagery with reality. That was really well done and is something I try to do. However, I didn't like the fantastical imagery so much. Whatever, at least you "get it," which I sense so many writers do not.

[Dancin' Man]

Aren't you guys glad I made him join?

[SubtleDagger]

Is this done yet?

[Dancin' Man]

it should be. ATC won.

[SubtleDagger]

Well he's on so he needs to make the threads.

[ATC]

It probably is. If I've won, I'd pick either Wax or Praise.

Ooh and I finished a recording today. www.purevolume.com/anticarnation if anyone's interested. The remix is going out to a radio station in Vancouver next month.

[SubtleDagger]

Yes, you've won, please make los threados.

[TojesDolan]

Congrats ATC. :clap: