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[Britt]

This is Broken Heart Symphony...

Chorus
Broken heart symphony, comfort me tonight
how could this happen I feel like I just died inside
can’t seem to put you behind me , believe me I’ve tried
so broken heart symphony comfort me tonight.

Verse 1
I can’t pretend that I don’t want you with me again
I’m hurting so badly, I feel like I’ve lost my only friend
for one more day I’ll pick the pieces up
I’ll pray for strength and I’ll hope for luck

*Chorus*

Verse 2
Every time I meet a stranger, I wish they were you
I see you in my dreams, see you in everything I do
I loved you more than anything only wish you knew ..
Your memories are haunting me, I just want a chance to make things right

*Chorus*

Coda
I know I’ve made my mistakes, but I’ll do whatever it takes to have you back agin, I just want you back again...

*end chorus*
So broken heart symphony, comfort me tonight
how could this happen I feel like I just died inside
can’t seem to put you behind me, Dammit I’ve tried
So broken heart symphony, comfort me tonight

[HomeCatMickey8]

In the fourth line of the chorus, you might want to make it "play for me tongiht", since you already said "comfort me tonight." Unless you want the whole repetitive thing. It's up to you.

The second line in the first verse is a little cliche. I don't have anything to suggest at the moment.

"Every time I meet a stranger, I wish that they were you" That's a nice line.

And if I'm reading this right the "Coda" part is sponken. Major props for that.

[lilsolsman]

Chorus
Broken heart symphony, comfort me tonight
how could this happen I feel like I just died inside
can’t seem to put you behind me , believe me I’ve tried
so broken heart symphony comfort me tonight.

Keep this. Make the second line 'How could this have happened?' and you're all set. Maybe make the last line 'So broken heart symphony, sing for me tonight'


I can’t pretend that I don’t want you with me again
I’m hurting so badly, I feel like I’ve lost my only friend
for one more day I’ll pick the pieces up
I’ll pray for strength and I’ll hope for luck

I don't like this verse. The first sentence is ok, but the second one is just too dramatic. It's a mistake i make often as well. The 3'd and 4th line are ok, but don't really do anything.

Every time I meet a stranger, I wish they were you
I see you in my dreams, see you in everything I do
I loved you more than anything only wish you knew ..
Your memories are haunting me, I just want a chance to make things right

The 3'd line is flawed. It's not correct grammar wise. The last sentence is too long. This verse is a little cliché but it could work.

I know I’ve made my mistakes, but I’ll do whatever it takes to have you back agin, I just want you back again...

Don't put this part in at all. It's overdone and it sounds really tacky. I mean, it sounds like you're crazy desprate. I mean, she's not the only girl in the world.

[Britt]

Thanks for the input....