Burning

[ibanezgsr200]

Burning
Verse:
I Can't Start to Think what to say
you've got me so confused
Now I'm drawing a blank
Cause I'm thinking about you
Chorus:
The flames are rising
I'm lost with out you
Now I'm burning
here without you
verse:
why can't I say what i want to say
I've been obsesing over you
you never thought of me
you just never got the clue
Verse:
I see the door
it couldn't be any more open
what i don't get any more
is why I cant step right in
your so close
yet I can't get to you
your right under my nose
yet i can't break through

Please Crit :D

[PunkyMcEmo]

Really, really cliche. That kills it. Good attempt though, especially if you're new at songwriting. It does rhyme, and flow and even make sense. The thing is, songs sound really bland when you've heard the same lines expressing the same idea over and over. Just words of advice. It was a good attempt. Keep practicing and you'll get better.