Please!! opinions on my second song

[Starman]

new song: :wave: http://www.myspace.com/sing2sin
This one, as the first, was recorded totally by me, so it can be heared some mistakes on the drums.

It is heavier than the first one, and the provitional name, is "betrayer"

Anyway, hope you like it, and if you could give me some suggestions, they will be appreciated.

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[LD50]

Hey man, get some vox happening and it`ll really fly. It`s not bad at all.

[Jilm21]

Pretty nice man reminds me of Rage Against the Machine I like it

[Yield]

Thats frickin good, i like it alot

[toxicmudd]

thats excellent, one of the best bass riffs iv herd in ages. Very RATM, and i luv it.

[Starman]

THANKS!!! :cool:
Im glad that you liked it :)

[Starman]

please some more comments!!

[Daisy_5]

I enjoyed both songs.I think the lack of vocals affects them but not that much. Musically they were all good. A good have funk vibe :)

[theosd]

Good arrangement - would love to hear it done in a live band situation. Get some soulful funky vocals on there in time, dude - It'll improve it no end - I've added you by the way ( I'm http://www.myspace.com/gummybabies - give us a listen back)!

[bolus]

Great arangments. Good playing. The drums are abit low on the mix though. keep it up!

[dedard9fx]

Yeah! Very great song man ! Sounds pretty good :thumb:

[Starman]

thanks:)
maybe some more??

[doublbassdruma17]

I liked it :thumb: it reminded me of a jazzy sort-of groove in the beginning

It had a nice bass rift as sumbody else said...and also like sumbody else else said the drums need to be a tad bit louder, but with vocals this would be very good :wave:

[iBENezrocker]

Nice one

[UsefulIdi0t]

Will you marry me?

[Starman]

Will you marry me?


:lol: :lol: Thats not something i would expect to read here!!!!!
But i think i can take it as a compliment, so thanks so much!!!:wave:

[DancingQueen]

i like it, it makes me wanna dance.

[CantBuyAThrill]

I liked the first song better than the second. It just "grooved" more. And it felt a little bit tighter, though there were a few mistakes I noticed in there.

The second needed some brushing up, especially on the staccato (spelling?) at the beginning and the (I guess you could call them) mini-breakdowns where it repeated that intro thing. It just wasn't as catchy and fun as the first one. All the same, I would definately come see you guys play if you were doing a gig or something, if that says anything. Constructive Criticism.

[Starman]

Thanks, im glad to have some good constructive criticism like that.
And i agree with the mistakes on both songs. :)

[rage f*****g rule]

i liked it a lot...
the major downfall is that it was a 4 and a half minute long instumental... made it kinda hard to listen to after a while... but then again it's a cool song and i personally think that vocals (unless they were really great) would take the atention away from a decent song...

my suggestion... cut it down to about 3 mins and leave it as an instrumental...

[Camel42]

THats cool; i wouldnt leave it as an instrumental though

[Walrus]

nice wprk sound cool the bass is great , vocals would make it come alive but u can hear and know how the lyrics are going to sound already(dont make it a typical effort try and make the lyrics different in some way). class tune

[smurfpirate]

awersome i would pay to here that keep it up

[Starman]

thanks!! maybe i will put some other songs soon.

[UncleDick]

Starman, Nice work! I'm like'n the groove you got going on! I'm hearing some Rage influence.. Kool, needs some vocals though. Good dynamics. Rockin!


Peace,

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