Challenge 95 - Replies

[SubtleDagger]

word ^

[EmergencyRoom]

I like words...

[DFelon204409]

/resubmits song

[Disco Dragon]

I like words...

Words hate you. I hate you. Everyone hates you. Go away you plague of a human being.

[SubtleDagger]

What a goth.

[EmergencyRoom]

Words hate you. I hate you. Everyone hates you. Go away you plague of a human being.

Harsh.

:-*

[-1up!-]

Subtle reminds me of this guy (http://pds.egloos.com/pds/1/200411/02/25/b0010825_5213869.jpg)

[EmergencyRoom]

Subtle reminds me of this guy (http://pds.egloos.com/pds/1/200411/02/25/b0010825_5213869.jpg)

Wow!

I'm a Muse fan and never noticed that. The difference is that Matt Bellamy's face is more pointed, but still, Wow!

[SubtleDagger]

I look nothing like that guy.

[EmergencyRoom]

I look nothing like that guy.

You're right Matt..I mean Burt :D

[SubtleDagger]

He's got a cleft chin for Christ's sake. And his hair is unbelievably short compared to mine.

[EmergencyRoom]

He's got a cleft chin for Christ's sake. And his hair is unbelievably short compared to mine.

You're not identical. Just similar featured.

Don't be upset :-*

[d0ped0g]

well, at least i'll have the word in there this time.
I couldve just modified the song from last challenge, but thought i'd put forth something fresh (so fresh that i literally typed it onto the screen)

do you think i should use that song from last challenge for a future one (i.e. howd yall like it?)

[SubtleDagger]

I didn't like it much, but I really shouldn't talk because I never seem to like any of your songs. :|

[TojesDolan]

I made a crusade-esque poem for this one... I'm not too fond of it. And it's not even that good. Well. Whatever. :D

[d0ped0g]

gee... thanks

oh well, at least you were honest :D

[Necroses-bass]

Matt Bellamy Is A Dude!!!!

[-1up!-]

Matt Bellamy Is A Dude!!!!

No way, I sure thought othwerwise!!!!11!!1!shiftone!1!1!eleven11!!!1

[EmergencyRoom]

No way, I sure thought othwerwise!!!!11!!1!shiftone!1!1!eleven11!!!1


!"£

coz hez like, wun of those high voiced dudes, lulz.

[TojesDolan]

There are some really strong entries this time... :(

Why did I put effort on this one, o why...

[DFelon204409]

Tojes I thought you were like "in charge" of S&L. See what happens when you step up to the plate against the heavy hitters?

[EmergencyRoom]

Tojes I thought you were like "in charge" of S&L. See what happens when you step up to the plate against the heavy hitters?

Fight! Fight! Fight! :p

[pixiesfanyo]

Dfelon doesn't wrestle, he beats bitches up.

[DFelon204409]

There are two DFelons

Sober = Beats bitches up
Drunk = Wrestle (I say "I make a wrestle" like Borat on the Ali G show)

[EmergencyRoom]

There are two DFelons

Sober = Beats bitches up
Drunk = Wrestle (I say "I make a wrestle" like Borat on the Ali G show)

Borat is a work of genius.

[TojesDolan]

Tojes I thought you were like "in charge" of S&L. See what happens when you step up to the plate against the heavy hitters?
Really? No, I guess I'm like, a contributer or something... I don't think I am like, the one who runs this. Besides, It'd take a lot of writing/reading skills to take charge of a forum like this, and I'm kind of in the middle in both aspects.

A complement, really (I hope that was the intention, if not... uh... :() But I can't really tell. I try to make myself a name somewhere in the site.

[SubtleDagger]

Time for entries to close. Vote.

[The Chemist]

I look nothing like that guy.
no, but nice avatar... " i'm the queen of france..."

[WhatILivefoR]

7. WhatILiveFor - The second stanza is... not so great, I didn't quite get it. Confusing, I guess.

Hm. I guess not everyone knows Shakespeare.
The second stanza includes a reference to Hamlet, just so you know. "I know not seems" is a direct quote from scene 2 of the first act: " 'Seems,' madam? Nay it is. I know not 'seems.' " (I.ii.79) You really need to know the plot to understand the sentiment. The strong emotion that Hamet is portraying through those lines to his mother was exactly what I wanted to show in my own lines. ...Guess it didn't work.
As for myself, I'm not a huge fan of Shakespeare, but Hamlet is one play that I actually enjoyed.

[-1up!-]

I'm not even English-speaking, I never would've known that.

[WhatILivefoR]

Well... I'm sure you've heard of Shakespeare? ...Old Dead White Guy; wrote a lot of plays and sonnets and coined over 2000 words and phrases? "To be, or not to be..." ?

No matter, really. But I'm glad I cleared that up (a little bit)... maybe?

meh.

[Dancin' Man]

As a note, I hate my piece. I feel like my writing's been a lot beter lately but that is not representational of my progress. Oh well. I'll try to vote tonight.

[TojesDolan]

Hm. I guess not everyone knows Shakespeare.
The second stanza includes a reference to Hamlet, just so you know. "I know not seems" is a direct quote from scene 2 of the first act: " 'Seems,' madam? Nay it is. I know not 'seems.' " (I.ii.79) You really need to know the plot to understand the sentiment. The strong emotion that Hamet is portraying through those lines to his mother was exactly what I wanted to show in my own lines. ...Guess it didn't work.
As for myself, I'm not a huge fan of Shakespeare, but Hamlet is one play that I actually enjoyed.
I will read something by that person you call Shake Spear... As soon as I finish all my other reading projects. :D

[EmergencyRoom]

I got the hamlet reference if that helps. :p

[DFelon204409]

Hahahahah. I love when people throw in allusion that's so esoteric and trivial it ceases to be an allusion. You know at the movie theater before the movie starts they have those little quiz questions like "Who said, 'I like peanut butter alright.'" These are quotations that are more trivial characters in movies nobody cares about and also the quote isn't even some defining cool quote that somebody would be able to figure out from reading its awesomeness. It's just dumb. That's why when I see somebody making an allusion to some line Shakespeare crossed off in a first draft of Hamlet while really stoned and probably getting rammed by a man or being split into multiple poets during the 16th century because Shakespeare has been hypothesized not to exist, I laugh.

I do like peanut butter though, I'll give you guys that much.

[EmergencyRoom]

Hahahahah. I love when people throw in allusion that's so esoteric and trivial it ceases to be an allusion. You know at the movie theater before the movie starts they have those little quiz questions like "Who said, 'I like peanut butter alright.'" These are quotations that are more trivial characters in movies nobody cares about and also the quote isn't even some defining cool quote that somebody would be able to figure out from reading its awesomeness. It's just dumb. That's why when I see somebody making an allusion to some line Shakespeare crossed off in a first draft of Hamlet while really stoned and probably getting rammed by a man or being split into multiple poets during the 16th century because Shakespeare has been hypothesized not to exist, I laugh.

I do like peanut butter though, I'll give you guys that much.

I disagree. I didn't think that it was a very esoteric quote. And it wasn't a trivial character, it was Hamlet himself. So your point sucks and doesn't apply here.

But peanut butter rules. :p

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

Crunchy > smooth.

[EmergencyRoom]

Crunchy > smooth.

Seconded.

[TojesDolan]

I disagree. I didn't think that it was a very esoteric quote. And it wasn't a trivial character, it was Hamlet himself. So your point sucks and doesn't apply here.

But peanut butter rules. :p
But it's like you started quoting things you've read because you think they are amazingly cool, but not everybody may know what you talk about. Like private jokes (I mean of a close group, not exactly talking about groins and what not) that only work with your friends but pretty much no one would really understand... At any rate, if they are really, really obvious, then you may be stupid, but well.

For instance, If I talk about pig heads talking to crazy boys, and then rolling stones crashing fat fucks, you might not know what I'm talking about, and I'd say "duh, leik, its so e-z lol!!1!" But well. Guess where I got that idea from and I'll give you an e-cookie.

And peanut butter = good. But Nutella is far better.

[EmergencyRoom]

But it's like you started quoting things you've read because you think they are amazingly cool, but not everybody may know what you talk about. Like private jokes (I mean of a close group, not exactly talking about groins and what not) that only work with your friends but pretty much no one would really understand... At any rate, if they are really, really obvious, then you may be stupid, but well.

For instance, If I talk about pig heads talking to crazy boys, and then rolling stones crashing fat fucks, you might not know what I'm talking about, and I'd say "duh, leik, its so e-z lol!!1!" But well. Guess where I got that idea from and I'll give you an e-cookie.

And peanut butter = good. But Nutella is far better.

Your idea works as a general rule. However, my point wasn't generalised. It was specific to someone who has (i assumed that Dfelon has due to the way he comments on it) read Hamlet. I know that to someone who hasn't read Hamlet, any line( kind of, as Hamlet was the source of hundreds of stock english phrases) could seem unfamiliar, but Dfelon suggests that it is a line spoken by a trivial character and isn't important, suggesting that he read and (partially) remembers it. :thumb:

[TojesDolan]

Well yeah, If you read something you'll only remember something that really catches your mind, not everything about the play. That'd be sick, unless you were a person dedicated to the life and work of Shakespeare...

Anyhow... Wait what the hell was I saying...

[EmergencyRoom]

Well yeah, If you read something you'll only remember something that really catches your mind, not everything about the play. That'd be sick, unless you were a person dedicated to the life and work of Shakespeare...

Anyhow... Wait what the hell was I saying...

:lol:

[DFelon204409]

Hahahahah. I love when people throw in allusion that's so esoteric and trivial it ceases to be an allusion. You know at the movie theater before the movie starts they have those little quiz questions like "Who said, 'I like peanut butter alright.'" These are quotations that are more trivial characters in movies nobody cares about and also the quote isn't even some defining cool quote that somebody would be able to figure out from reading its awesomeness. It's just dumb. That's why when I see somebody making an allusion to some line Shakespeare crossed off in a first draft of Hamlet while really stoned and probably getting rammed by a man or being split into multiple poets during the 16th century because Shakespeare has been hypothesized not to exist, I laugh.

I do like peanut butter though, I'll give you guys that much.

I meant in general not this specific one. Often people make these really abstruse references that don't matter to anybody. I probably shouldn't have used Hamlet as an example because that was merely for effect. Shoulda say Timon of Athens, which is pretty spurious if you ask me.

[TojesDolan]

Or for instance, for that post of mine above, I was alusing "The lord of the flies". For instance, you'd never get it even if your life depended on it if you haven't read the book. Or like a lot of the jokes in the Simpsons. Most of them are enjoyable for the regular viewer, but certain epsiodes that you could only get with a certain level of pop culture/any kind of culture.

There's a fine line that blurs between being funny with quotes, or trying to be smart through them, and being overly intelligent and uptight about it.

[DFelon204409]

Except for the fact that all Simpsons/Family Guy/Futurama/Adult Swim quotes should be mandatory for the LC repetoire.

[TojesDolan]

Except for the fact that all Simpsons/Family Guy/Futurama/Adult Swim quotes should be mandatory for the LC repetoire.
Haha... No I mean the serious ones... Like in the episode when the kids go to the "Kamp Krusty" and it really sucks... and then Bart goes insane and takes over: When Kent Brockman arrives with the cameras, as he approaches the hut where Bart is, there's a Pig's head impaled, with a lot of flies around: clear humor for those who've read The Lord of the flies, as I've stated for quite some posts now.

Anyhow, literature is so underrated nowadays... I would study something related to that, I love writing, and I also love painting, so I'd study arts, but I can't see myself living from those: It's almost impossible. It takes basically a lot of contacts, more than talent. Talent is important, but connections > every single drop of talent.

That's why I want to major in electronics/mechatronics engineering, so I can relate in some crazy form my love for music with a serious work-line, and in a way that I can dedicate my free time entirely to writing and painting.

[WhatILivefoR]

aaand, I was just trying to clear things up.

I'm sorry for people who didn't catch the allusion. You are correct DFelon, it's not an allusion to Hamlet's "to be or not to be" soliloquy (most people don't even know that it's from Hamlet) but it's not "esoteric and trivial". It's from Hamlet's first 'longer line' (if you will) speaking with his mother, and the emotion is clear.
The stanza in which the 'seems' quote is, is not undecipherable without knowing where that came from. I'm pretty sure it makes sense. Sorry if you don't get it.

[SubtleDagger]

It doesn't make sense if you haven't brushed up on Hamlet because you are using it verbatim and out of his Old English context. If you had changed it to "I know not 'seems'" it would make a bit more sense, but it would still look and sound wrong in the context of a piece written in today's English.

In other words, it doesn't work for me.

[EmergencyRoom]

I'm agreeing with Subtle. I got the reference but the context doesn't really add to the point of it. And i also get what Dfelon means, just thought Hamlet was a bit of a bad choice to illustrate it :D

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/has never read Hamlet, or any part of it.

[TojesDolan]

/has never read Hamlet, or any part of it.
You mentioned not being from an English-speaking country.

Where are you from, then? France? Germany?

[-1up!-]

I'm a lot closer than that... heh heh

[TojesDolan]

OIC... then latin american, I guess. :D

[DFelon204409]

He could be in Canada in Quebec for example. Or he could live in Oakland. The language they speak there is definitely not English anymore.

[TojesDolan]

:lol:

Anyway I don't think he's Canadian.

Canadian MXers are very proud and mention it every possible second.

[-1up!-]

OIC... then latin american, I guess. :D

even CLOSER...

I'm from Quebec.

[Dancin' Man]

So you're fake French or fake Canadian?

[EmergencyRoom]

When do we have to vote by?

[TojesDolan]

even CLOSER...

I'm from Quebec.
oic.

Because I though all the canadian people were like "LOOK AT ME I'M CANADIAN, I LOVE HOCKEY".

It's good to see an exception. :D

[-1up!-]

So you're fake French or fake Canadian?

Is that fake humor or fake stupidity?

I hate hockey anyway, and I have nothing but utter contempt for patriotism; I'll never be "proud" of my country. I hate cold weather, snow, and all the **** we get in winter, although it IS fun to walk outside when freezing rain just fell, as everything is even more slippery than hockey ice.

[TojesDolan]

Is that fake humor or fake stupidity?

I hate hockey anyway, and I have nothing but utter contempt for patriotism; I'll never be "proud" of my country. I hate cold weather, snow, and all the **** we get in winter, although it IS fun to walk outside when freezing rain just fell, as everything is even more slippery than hockey ice.
Ha, I wished I had snow here. Bloody desertic America.

[DFelon204409]

Go to college on the east coast. Its a trip.

It's like the Da Vinci Code.

[TojesDolan]

It has a lot of falacies about Jesus and Christianity but it's fun to get there?

Yeah. I'm thinking of MIT for college. Maybe.

[-1up!-]

Ha, I wished I had snow here. Bloody desertic America.

I wish I lived in a desert. (With a pool.

and infinite food.)

Snow gets tiring real quick if you're not into skiing/snowboard like everyone and their mother here. Though I might discover a new fun with snow this winter, if me and my stoner friends are into having snowball fights and building fortresses under the influence of, well, yeah.

[EmergencyRoom2]

Yeah, so i was walking down the interweb, minding my own business when i bumped into Strum...

To cut a long story short, there was an accident with the Banaxe and now i can't edit my "voting" post.

Is it ok to post another voting post in there and when do i have to vote by?

Thanks

[pixiesfanyo]

Yeah, so i was walking down the interweb, minding my own business when i bumped into Strum...

To cut a long story short, there was an accident with the Banaxe and now i can't edit my "voting" post.

Is it ok to post another voting post in there and when do i have to vote by?

Thanks

yes

[DFelon204409]

It has a lot of falacies about Jesus and Christianity but it's fun to get there?

Yeah. I'm thinking of MIT for college. Maybe.

Ya, good thing you're not applying to Kenyon.

[DFelon204409]

Yeah, so i was walking down the interweb, minding my own business when i bumped into Strum...

To cut a long story short, there was an accident with the Banaxe and now i can't edit my "voting" post.

Is it ok to post another voting post in there and when do i have to vote by?

Thanks

Try to do it today. That's help things out.

In other news, Kayo Dot rules almost as much as Maudlin of the Well and almost as much as oral sex set to Maudlin of the Well.

[SubtleDagger]

I'll be voting in just a bit. Sorry for the hold-up, my internet's been funky and I've been major busy.

[DFelon204409]

Ya, I've been way busy too. School is much more intense this year.

[TojesDolan]

http://numb.deslizo.net/fotos2/conor_oberst-thumb.jpg

For some reason, Conor Oberst reminds me of Burt. He has that crazy smile too. :)

[-1up!-]

yeah Burt looks like Matt Bellamy from Muse, too. We all know Burt likes to cry to Bright Eyes and attempts to sing like Matt in secret, though.

[SubtleDagger]

I've been told I look like a lot of people. Rarely singers though, usually like Orlando Bloom or Tom Cruise or something.

[EmergencyRoom2]

I've been told I look like a lot of people. Rarely singers though, usually like Orlando Bloom or Tom Cruise or something.

Subtle the modest mod :p

Can i also have a few pointers on my piece from you ?

thanks

[DFelon204409]

I've been told I look like a lot of people. Rarely singers though, usually like Orlando Bloom or Tom Cruise or something.


tool. get back in the toolshed

[d0ped0g]

man i'd hate to look like Orlando Bloom... mainly because so many chicks find him hot, and he doesnt have anything masculine about him

plus, what's with him and his bow! ****ing grab a sword and chop some heads off you little *****. Man it must be easy to kill people from a safe distance, you fag. Sure you got aim, but you aint exactly risking your life.

[TojesDolan]

man i'd hate to look like Orlando Bloom... mainly because so many chicks find him hot, and he doesnt have anything masculine about him

plus, what's with him and his bow! ****ing grab a sword and chop some heads off you little *****. Man it must be easy to kill people from a safe distance, you fag. Sure you got aim, but you aint exactly risking your life.
His name is the same as mine. But I'm not as hot as he is.

I wish I were hot. :upset:

Or at least write something good sometime.

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man i'd hate to look like Orlando Bloom... mainly because so many chicks find him hot, and he doesnt have anything masculine about him

plus, what's with him and his bow! ****ing grab a sword and chop some heads off you little *****. Man it must be easy to kill people from a safe distance, you fag. Sure you got aim, but you aint exactly risking your life.

:lol: :lol:

[SubtleDagger]

Subtle the modest mod :p

Can i also have a few pointers on my piece from you ?

thanks
I thought every area where something was in italics came off as melodramatic/annoyingly angsty. The ending line is also really really bad.

[EmergencyRoom]

I thought every area where something was in italics came off as melodramatic/annoyingly angsty. The ending line is also really really bad.

I meant those lines thto come across as venomously emphasised but i get what you mean. The last line is something most people that critiqued it in the main forum picked up on and it's the first thing i'll be changing.

Thank you.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

man i'd hate to look like Orlando Bloom... mainly because so many chicks find him hot, and he doesnt have anything masculine about him

plus, what's with him and his bow! ****ing grab a sword and chop some heads off you little *****. Man it must be easy to kill people from a safe distance, you fag. Sure you got aim, but you aint exactly risking your life.

I'm such a nerd for saying this, but it's a book. Plus in the third movie (which I've only seen one time), he climbs those elephant things.

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"First off, your use of rhyme is not becoming of you."

Dancin' Man wrote this about my lyrics... See, I'm not English-speaking. So while it doesn't show in vocabulary, I can't understand some of your expressions and sentence subtlenesses.

To cut it short: what does he mean? I don't have a clue.

[TojesDolan]

You suck at rhyming. :D

:-*

[super deluxe]

or Tom Cruise or something.


That has a lot more to do with your scientology and desire to stick people half your age.

[kevbud187]

man i'd hate to look like Orlando Bloom... mainly because so many chicks find him hot, and he doesnt have anything masculine about him

plus, what's with him and his bow! ****ing grab a sword and chop some heads off you little *****. Man it must be easy to kill people from a safe distance, you fag. Sure you got aim, but you aint exactly risking your life.

Wow...I forgot how lame these threads were....

[SubtleDagger]

That has a lot more to do with your scientology and desire to stick people half your age.
I hate scientology and half my age is nine and a half.

So you were half right.

[d0ped0g]

I'm such a nerd for saying this, but it's a book. Plus in the third movie (which I've only seen one time), he climbs those elephant things.

yeah i know its a book and he's just playing a part... but trust him to be the fag elf that has to shoot a ***** arrow at someone rather than being a man and driving cold steel through their bodies and tearing them apart. Just like in Troy, when he sees archilles and brad pitt starts walking towards him while hes shooting him in the ****ing chest with arrows... what a ***** way to take someone down, its hardly dramatic. Brad Pitt is just like "yeah man, its gonna take more of those to get me on the ground... fagg0t".

i'll stop ranting about my hatred for orlando bloom now... but i cant think of something else worth talking about

[DFelon204409]

Wow...I forgot how lame these threads were....

Says the person who consistently got voted worst writer in all the challenges (s)he entered.

[A_Perfect_Sonnet]

yeah i know its a book and he's just playing a part... but trust him to be the fag elf that has to shoot a ***** arrow at someone rather than being a man and driving cold steel through their bodies and tearing them apart. Just like in Troy, when he sees archilles and brad pitt starts walking towards him while hes shooting him in the ****ing chest with arrows... what a ***** way to take someone down, its hardly dramatic. Brad Pitt is just like "yeah man, its gonna take more of those to get me on the ground... fagg0t".

i'll stop ranting about my hatred for orlando bloom now... but i cant think of something else worth talking about

Ur juzt m@d cuz hes k00lr n hOTT3r den uuuu LOLZ!!!

[SubtleDagger]

Lowest scores are dropped and noted.

-1up!- - DQ'd.
EmergencyRoom - 6 4 5 7 6 7 (8) ; 35/6 = 5.83
TojesDolan - 8 7 8 2 (10) 9 10 ; 46/6 = 7.66
Lowridden - 3 3 4 4 (5) 5 2 ; 21/6 = 3.5
d0ped0g - DQ'd.
bowl of oranges - DQ'd.
WhatILiveFor - (10) 7 9 10 6 8 4 ; 44/6 = 7.33
SubtleDagger - 1 2 1 1 (3) 3 1 ; 9/6 = 1.5
ATC - 4 5 (10) 5 9 10 5 ; 38/6 = 6.33
pixiesfanyo - 5 (10) 4 10 2 3 1 ; 25/6 = 4.16
Dancin' Man - (9) 3 6 7 8 2 6 ; 32/6 = 5.33

1. SubtleDagger
2. Lowridden
3. pixiesfanyo
4. Dancin' Man
5. EmergencyRoom
6. ATC
7. WhatILiveFor
8. TojesDolan

I'll have the next challenge up soon. -1up!-, d0ped0g, and bowl of oranges are disqualified from entering the next challenge.

[Lowridenn]

Hey, second place. Not bad. Thanks all.

[SubtleDagger]

No problem. You actually did very well, stick around for a while.

[kevbud187]

Says the person who consistently got voted worst writer in all the challenges (s)he entered.

I resent that....

btw ya i figured that out and i decided to make that a secondary goal and work on becoming a producer. I guess I'm batter at that cuz I have a label. Funny how things turn out.

[SubtleDagger]

Ugh, shut up. Post in the new thread. Also, no one gives a crap about your "label".