Tequila

[Varment]

Aight this is like one of my first ska songs I've wrote, I'm more into political and darker lyrics but well here it goes.
It's about an alcoholic who's addicted to tequila and Istill have tio write a bridge for it, I got the music sorted and this fits.

Tequila
verse1
12 0’clock a liquor lunch it’ll keep me pissed for a while
Picking a fight with a face I don’t know, waking up with a bleeding nose
Falling asleep in a random hedge, woken up by blood from my head
Work in a hour I’m hung over, gonna drink some tequila instead

verse2
Which ways home? Oh there’s a tree, wonder if there’s a pub by me
Buy me a drink I’ll get you one later, please I’m dying for the taste
Closing time and I’m paralytic, woke up lying where my vomit has spread
I got fired from work and I don’t care I think I’ll have some tequila instead

Chorus
Thank you Mexico and the Agave plant
For making this tasteful drink
I can’t stop drinking and I don’t know why
Tequila
It makes my mouth water
The delicious drink that gets you ****ed
I got no dignity but I don’t care
Tequila
My breakfast and supper
Keeps me warm when I’m sleeping outside
Makes my sick turn a cool colour
Tequila
Keep a bottle under my pillow
Just in case the crave begins
I don’t know why but I’m hooked
Tequila

verse3
Friday night at the elephant bar, the only one I’m not barred from
I should really quit drinking but it’s easier said than done
I’ll admit now that I’m an alcoholic, I’ve drank so much that I’m now brain dead
Been kicked out my home and I should care but I’d rather have some tequila instead

verse4
Drowning my blues in this booze, fell in a river and lost my shoes
Gotta go to the hospital 2 times a week, the price you pay for the life you chose
Throwing up my insides and blood, my puke is now a scarlet red
Critically Ill and should only drink water but I’d rather have some tequila instead

Chorus

[TojesDolan]

mmm... Judging the title, I hope this song is about having fun and being drunk. Let's take a peek.

12 0’clock a liquor lunch it’ll keep me pissed for a while
Picking a fight with a face I don’t know, waking up with a bleeding nose
Falling asleep in a random hedge, woken up by blood from my head
Work in a hour I’m hung over, gonna drink some tequila instead

mmm... starts with some wit and all... You know being an alcoholic from his point of view... I don't know. It could work.

Which ways home? Oh there’s a tree, wonder if there’s a pub by me
Buy me a drink I’ll get you one later, please I’m dying for the taste
Closing time and I’m paralytic, woke up lying where my vomit has spread
I got fired from work and I don’t care I think I’ll have some tequila instead

Good, keeps the humor. I like that.

Thank you Mexico and the Agave plant
For making this tasteful drink
I can’t stop drinking and I don’t know why
Tequila
It makes my mouth water
The delicious drink that gets you ****ed
I got no dignity but I don’t care
Tequila
My breakfast and supper
Keeps me warm when I’m sleeping outside
Makes my sick turn a cool colour
Tequila
Keep a bottle under my pillow
Just in case the crave begins
I don’t know why but I’m hooked
Tequila

Ha. It keeps alright. I don't know about the length of the chorus... It can be a little boring, especially for ska, but it's very well written.

Friday night at the elephant bar, the only one I’m not barred from
I should really quit drinking but it’s easier said than done
I’ll admit now that I’m an alcoholic, I’ve drank so much that I’m now brain dead
Been kicked out my home and I should care but I’d rather have some tequila instead

Drowning my blues in this booze, fell in a river and lost my shoes
Gotta go to the hospital 2 times a week, the price you pay for the life you chose
Throwing up my insides and blood, my puke is now a scarlet red
Critically Ill and should only drink water but I’d rather have some tequila instead


Very good, just try to write some what with a better structura and it'll come out better. Trust me. :D

[Varment]

hey cheers for the crit

The chorus what you thought was long is this proper catchy rhytm, it's 4 bars I think so it shouldn't be long, erm The structure of lyrics is to fit the music so what you mean by me writting it with a better structure?

[shadow120]

12 0’clock a liquor lunch it’ll keep me pissed for a while
Picking a fight with a face I don’t know, waking up with a bleeding nose
Falling asleep in a random hedge, woken up by blood from my head
Work in a hour I’m hung over, gonna drink some tequila instead

Haha drunken fun, nice song, i suppose this is meant for a punky-kind of music backing?

[Varment]

Straight up 3rdwave ska dawg