Prozac King

[BlacklightGuitarist]

Been inspired by Radiohead, lately, and I wrote this somewhat in the vein of (excuse my arrogance) Kid A - like Motion Picture Soundtrack/Everything in it's Right Place. I'm not sure about the bridge... The song is plenty long enough without it. Any thoughts are greatly appreciated!


Prozac King
Andy Thomas

Sleeping pills,
Would you take me far away?
From here?
I'll be your king of infinite nothing.

Cheap thrills,
Everything you take away,
From me.
Everything falls in the end.

Window sills,
Loneliness or fame?
Tears or rain?
Am I dead or insane?

Your prozac king,
Is he everything you need?
Is he everything,
That I could never be?
I could never be...
I could never be...

[Pavlo]

Sleeping pills,
Would you take me far away?
From here?
I'll be your king of infinite nothing.
"will you" instead of "would you"


Cheap thrills,
Everything you take away,
From me.
Everything falls in the end.
You packed too many ideas into this 1 stanza making it too abstract

Window sills,
Loneliness or fame?
Tears or rain?
Am I dead or insane?
Death and insanity are not often mistaken between the one another, so that question is like asking "would you like a worm or a spider in your apple?" ... I would say "am I rightious or insane"

Same sort of goes for fame and loneliness, they arent exact opposites sinces you can be both at the same time. "seclusion or fame" would be better.

Your prozac king,
Is he everything you need?
Is he everything,
That I could never be?
I could never be...
I could never be...
I love the ending

Keep up the good work and always reread, revise, and rewrite.

[ShakeyAir]

First up, keep it as dead or insane, I get exactly what you mean with that, and I like the second stanza, I agree about the will you, however, but if that doesn't fit your meaning then maybe 'could' or 'can' would work too.

I don't like how the 'king' switches from being you in the first stanza, to the pills in the end, it makes it kind of confusing (Though now that I'm writing it out I can see that maybe your getting at something with the shift, but its barely apparrent)

I'd swap the end with something else, I don't know what.

Maybe 'I'm everything I need' in that what with the pills and all you kinda lose the need for interaction. I don't know.

Good song.

[insaneflyingmonkey]

Prozac King
Andy Thomas

Sleeping pills,
Would you take me far away?
From here?
I'll be your king of infinite nothing.

Good, but what's with the question mark on line two? I do believe it should be removed for fear of breaking up that thought too much.

Cheap thrills,
Everything you take away,
From me.
Everything falls in the end.

Not bad, not much to comment on here...

Window sills,
Loneliness or fame?
Tears or rain?
Am I dead or insane?

"Window sills," seems random and pointless, but I like it. The rest seems kinda cliche.

Your prozac king,
Is he everything you need?
Is he everything,
That I could never be?
I could never be...
I could never be...

I rather like this part. Quite nice for an ending.


Overall: Good.

Is this Mr. A Thomas the "Hyena," or am I really that special?