3 years old

[Blow_My_Dice]

This is just a song that I found that I happened to make like 3 years ago, and I just decided whether or not I should even waste my time on putting some music behind this. It has a pretty basic idea behind it so I don't know if it's just another song, or if it's good. Thanks.



(verse)
Before I met you
I was happy
Now that I'm with you
I'm miserable
(All members say) because of these games that we play
These games
They drag me down
They wear me out
I don't want to play them
Today

(Chorus)
What do youw ant me to do
What do youw ant me to say
What are you trying to do
What are you trying to say

(Verse)
Everyday you choose for me
to do something else
Everyday you choose for me
to say something else
I can't help myself
When will it stop
I've had enough
Just leave me alone
And let me be by myself
(All members) I'd liek it that way

(Chorus)
What do youw ant me to do
What do youw ant me to say
What are you trying to do
What are you trying to say

(Verse)
We always get into arguements
It's no fun to play
You better quit acting that way
Or I'll end up walking away
I guess I'm though with you
(All members) I quit to day

[whatisititisit]

1) whos all members?
2) the verses are too plain, and the rhymes are basic needs alot of work
3) the chorus has a nice ring to it, wouldnt change that
4) some of the rhymes are too repetative, there needs to be some variation instead of rhyming the same words over and over, sometimes it doesnt even have to rhyme...

pz. (if poss crit mine)