The Philadelphia Experiment

[BlacklightGuitarist]

The Philadelphia Experiment
Andy Thomas

You couldn't face,
The pain you tasted,
Kept it all inside,
Hoping it would disappear,
And there,
The darkness could reside.

You built a ship,
In case you slipped,
And let everything fall.
Doomed to sleep,
In ocean's deep,
Davy Jones' locker calls.

How real do I have to be to scream?
How much truth before it's a lie?
Would you smother my cry,
As you watch me slip away?
Like the Philadelphia Experiment.

Invisible army to charm,
Napalm,
And sleeping pills,
So you hide,
Innocent light,
From everything that kills.

The cargo hold,
The love you sold,
The hurt and hate you didn't need,
The falling cards,
The broken hearts,
But it's your insanity,
That you will never leave behind...

[Electric Riley]

You're too good. Get out of here.

/Jealousy

[Crimsonpunk]

This is really cool, rhyming is perfect, if i knew what the philidelphia experiment was, i'd probably get it a bit more, but still good, second stanza is the best. Cheerz for the crit again.

[BlacklightGuitarist]

The Philadelphia Experiment refers to something that may or may NOT have happened in the early 1940s. Albert Einstein's theory that you could bend light waves with magnets was apparently tried out on a ship called the USS Eldridge and all hell broke loose. It disappeared and did all sorts of clever things, before reappearing with it's crew either insane, fused into the ship, or missing completely.

The song, however, uses the Philadelphia Experiment as a metaphor for something else... Hope that sets peoples' minds at rest.

[Electric Riley]

*Simile

[BlacklightGuitarist]

It would be a simile would be if I was comparing the two. I'm actually calling it The Philadelphia Experiment... For no reason other than the sheer, unadulterated hell of it. And because I can.

[Electric Riley]

Like the Philadelphia Experiment.

Simile is saying something is like something.

Metaphor is saying something is something

[Hardrockguitardude16]

I like this i do, well done. Very passionate and emotional.

[Sloth]

oh shut up! The simile/metaphor arguement isn't needed..

As always, it's a pleasure Blacklight. Your writing is quite a refresher around here. Even though I like the whole thing, I would probably agree that the 2ns stanza's the best. "MAD PROPS!" :lol:

[Noku]

I didn't like it that much. Imaginary is kind of poor and I just can't find a point from it. Was it supposed to be mixture of political and dealing-with-emotions song? It's just average song with slightly fun idea of mixing "fictional" event with something else. In scale of 0 to 10 I'd say this is 6.

[factor46]

It was one of those, more simple songs. Simple, but nicely written. I like the title, but also I like the wording throughout. Emotionally-portrayed songs always tickle my fancy. Not to sure if I like the rhyming or not. It flows the song nicely, but songs that rhyme always seem to make the piece sound generic and immaturely written. But that's my opinion. This song, however, is definately not immaturely written. It's a very well built, and worded piece of work. Nice job.


And thanks for the crit on mine. :thumb: