Drunk - pleaseee crit.

[DearJaded]

wellllll... its no suprise
that im face down in a puddle again
breathing in the h2o again
spinning... the world just aint streight
i dont need to lie and i cant deny
i dont even wanna try.....
cause now....

drink drank drunk
I'm ****ed up again
not much of a supprise
and not really a sin

i know this place
i've been here before
places always seem the same
its just the faces that change
and you, left me here
i guess its tiring after a while
seeing such an insincire smile
not another fight again
ill just pretend im not....

drink drank drunk
I'm ****ed up again
not much of a supprise
and not really a sin

do you remember
back when things were lovely
and beautifull way back then
well thats gone now, im done
and im saying good bye my friend
with suit cases full to the brim
im walkin out that door again
so i guess this must be the end
cause were yelling again....
falling down im in a puddle again
breathing in that h2o again
whennnn.....whennn will this end...?

now im drunk again..
drunk drunk drunk again...

[jade858907]

i say 7/10, it was good, but can be better. love the idea, stick with the:
Drink, drank, drunk again
I'm ****ed up again
not much of a supprise
and not really a sin

That was good. It stuck out most to me. The rest just needs some touch ups. it is pretty good, ~jade

[Synesthesia_RC43]

Good dude but i think on one of my cd's its either anti flag or sum other band that has a song called drink drank drunk

[DearJaded]

yeah lol anti flag does have a song that says drink drank punk is what its called im pretty sure, and thanks for mentioning that cause now im in the mood to get an antiflag cd :D

thanks you guys :) if theres anything u want me to crit lemme know