Sacrafice <read it

[Behind Zildjians]

Its like a constant reminder
a constant confiner
of all that never will be

a shining blue light
a self sacrafice
well help this race to see

the staggering ground
all spinning around
you mind will never see

as darkness sets in
you want to begin
a brand new life of peace...

...

If theres a man out of water, blood smeard in his hand
and scars and wounds of a thousand men
when you joion him maybe you will understand
the light at the end of the tunnels no friend
when you slave for your wife, slave for your home
theres no fu ckin way im dieing alone
its time for redemption, time for new life
im sick of constant sacrafice

[ozzfest05]

first to say, you should fix some spelling you dont want mistakes to ruin your song not that im any better tho..lol. i absolutly love your last paragraph

when you slave for your wife, slave for your home
theres no fu ckin way im dieing alone
its time for redemption, time for new life
im sick of constant sacrafice

i would do a new intro to your song though something that grabs your attention, but its cool cause it the songs ending is the best part, leave on a high note.

check out mine..

[PunkyMcEmo]

its sacrifice. if youre the one writing the song, you should know how to spell the title

songs not too bad. its catchy. kinda mallcore though, which prolly isnt what youre going for. i dunno. id probably appreciate it if you at least tried to spell correctly. it really makes you seem a lot dumber than you are.

[Behind Zildjians]

:lol: i was half asleep when i wrote the song.... sacrifice is how you spell it i know... i put it up to the insomnia

[Behind Zildjians]

ah... noone?