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Understanding In a Crash
08-05-2005, 08:49 PM
Its got an NOFX vibe to it.

A) Live in a dead car B) Sell Out, and our friends hate us
When I was young I thought it was easy
Join a band, and record a hit CD.
Only my friends would be there in the very end
And not these black suit executives shaking their heads
Before you gave us a chance, we did everything our self
Promote, play, and record, everything within us.
So don’t get the idea you own everything for yourself.

How could something with such good intention go so bad?
Why must you tell us what we need to wear?
I wake up and still see the same world but the world is shaken by your heir.

Don’t tell me to grow my hair out and dye it jet black
I don’t want to associate with such trendy crap
Give me the chance, to do it by myself
I’ll do it my way and with none of your help.
You cant tell me that we aren’t good enough or you wouldn’t of signed us
Now don’t tell us what to do because we have our own intentions.

How could something with such good intention go so bad?
Why must you tell us what we need to wear?
I wake up and still see the same world but the world is shaken by your heir.

Don’t tell us to change our name because it isn’t what you want
If I wanted too I’d call us “Flying ****ed”.
Say you want us to support the president, tell our fans to vote
I’ll tell our fans the President ****ed up, and that isn’t a joke
The first president in U.S. history with a criminal record, isn’t who I chose
When did this country become so homeless, and when will we boast?

No time for.. anything sweep it under the rug,
And this is what I fight for
This is where I come from.

PunkyMcEmo
08-05-2005, 09:19 PM
hahaha no record company company in the world would ask you to support dubbaya. well, maybe if youre a country singer. but chances are, if youre a punk band, youll have no problems in that area.

its okay, but umm... itd seem kinda awkward to sing about getting big and selling out... when chances are youve never done either.
oh well. not bad, but it wasnt my cup of tea.

LTJ386
08-05-2005, 10:34 PM
When I was young I thought it was easy
Join a band, and record a hit CD


Say you want us to support the president, tell our fans to vote
I’ll tell our fans the President ****ed up, and that isn’t a joke

I really liked those two lines. Overall, I thought your piece had its good and bad moments. In some places you repeated yourself and in others it didn't flow too well, but with some editing this could be a good piece.

insaneflyingmonkey
08-05-2005, 11:28 PM
First verse was the strongest. Second verse was weak (esp. 2nd line). Third verse turned into an anti-Bush, anti-War song outta nowhere, making it seem disjointed and unorganized. Has a few flow issues. Keep trying.

nonamemadox
08-06-2005, 01:17 PM
pretty good song, but its kinda hard to read in lins with the rhyming. id cut down on all the words.
for example, instead of:
"how could somthing with such good intensions go so wrong?"
you could try:
"how could something so good go so wrong?"

but what ever, its your song.....

ozzfest05
08-06-2005, 02:37 PM
i dont really enjoy the theme but you can tell you put time into it, structure is not bad either, some parts i dont really think should be in the song but overall not bad...