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Iron_Weed
08-04-2005, 05:00 AM
Ok I wrote this crazy sequel to Jimmy was a Superhero. If it were an album this would come straight after that song, with weird slightly menacing music and semi free flowing lyrics. Haha, not sure how I feel about this so crit away.

Suddenly
Jimmy’s arch nemesis Steve
Who was a superfiend
Of lawful qualities
Approached Jimmy
With a smile of victory
And said to Jimmy
Jimmy, you are under arrest
For flying whilst under the influence
Of psychedelic drugs
And Jimmy’s hands were cuffed
By an evil device crafted of Jimmy’s one weakness
Reality

Welcome to
The lair
Of Steve
And many other superfiends!
I’m afraid
There’s no way
For you to escape
This time, Jimmy!
For you are trapped
In a subterranean
Discharger!
With walls
Closing in on you
More and more each second!

How will Jimmy escape?
Stay tuned
Next week
For the shocking conclusion!

And then on the next episode
As audiences
Excitedly waited for Jimmy’s adventures
And just after the Jimmy theme song had played
And the narrator, reassessed
Jimmy’s dire situation
We found Jimmy still had one strip of acid left
Which he had concealed from Steve
Secretly
And he flew
And he blew
All the superfiends
Back to California!
Where they all set up
Small firms
So they could one day have enough money
To rebuild a secret lair
And Jimmy had saved the day again
And fulfilled the expectations
That someone who chooses
To watch the Jimmy the Superhero show
Would wish fulfilled!

JohnXDoe
08-04-2005, 05:11 AM
No no no! When the heck did Jimmy become a burned out acid dropper? Yes, I know you flirted with the theme in the first Jimmy song, but this goes too far. And Jimmy captured? Noooo! I like Jimmy spinning and free to fight crime unabated. And who is this Steve guy? He blows! It's all wrong, wrong, WRONG!

Other then my issues with it, it's pretty cool, though. :p

BlacklightGuitarist
08-04-2005, 05:14 AM
I'm hooked. Getting the jitters waiting for the next episode... This is cool. Kinda reminds me of Wonderboy by Tenacious D, but dinky theme. Rock on. Andy

Iron_Weed
08-04-2005, 05:21 AM
Haha, yeah I admit I was way too obvious with the possibility he could just be some aging hippy in this one. Sorry. (Ruins Jimmy)

PunkyMcEmo
08-04-2005, 09:00 AM
dude. haha jimmy rules.

Gypsy Campervan
08-04-2005, 10:19 AM
You have ruined Jimmy.

Iron_Weed
08-04-2005, 01:30 PM
It's looking pretty even at the moment, I should put up a poll for whether I ruined Jimmy or not......

absentimental
08-04-2005, 09:51 PM
This is song has a cool concept to it. I am guessing that that tempo is quit fast?
Anyways I do like this song and as far as I am concerned you have commited a good writting.

off to check out your other one

sportsfan4427
08-04-2005, 09:58 PM
this is awesome
are you gonna make another one?

Iron_Weed
08-05-2005, 12:11 AM
Um....dunno. I feel that I should really stop before it just becomes standard.

nonamemadox
08-06-2005, 01:08 PM
Yea!
I was at the edge if my seat the entire song.
Thats the song for me man.
Right on!

ozzfest05
08-06-2005, 02:35 PM
lol go jimmy

Iron_Weed
08-06-2005, 11:45 PM
Cheers guys, glad you liked it.

Behind Zildjians
08-06-2005, 11:49 PM
uhh... pretty good lol.... wierd but good... i shouldnt be talking, i wrote a song bout psychosis :lol: but good had reading on

9/10

check mine out
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=375731

Iron_Weed
08-08-2005, 01:19 PM
Thanks, I'll crit you back soon. Sorry I hadn't done it earlier but I've been really busy.