Incinerate

[VanitysNewGun]

"Incinerate"

Burn it up and turn my heart into dust
It was the worst mistake I ever made
To fall down until I fell into love
And then let my silence do the talking

{Pre-chorus}
With every word I write
All my sorrow ignites
Making my pain shine bright

{Chorus}
Tonight
All the stars will fall like tears
Because I was never clear
I can feel what wasn't said
Hold this gun up to my head
Tonight

Kill it now, the anguish that fills this room
I could feel the tears start to be sewn shut
when your beauty collided with my eyes
But I could never piece together words

{Pre-chorus}

{Chorus}

{Bridge}
Are you dreaming
While I'm screaming
to be heard by you?
Are you dreaming
While I'm screaming
for nothing brand new?

Tonight
All the stars will fall like tears
Because I was never clear
I can feel what wasn't said
Hold this gun up to my head
Tonight
And why could I never say
"I think I love you by the way"
I can feel what wasn't said
Hold this gun up to my head
Tonight

[Riding The Short Bus]

Pretty good. I guarentee someone on here will call you on the rhyming pattern, don't listen to 'em it sounds good the way it is, and flows nicely. Pretty much nothing bad to say about this. Pre-chours and chorus are go. Get some good music to bak this up and you got a good song.

Crit mine if you could, "Last stop for a man named Joe"

[VanitysNewGun]

thanks very much for reading, I'll go crit that right away :)

[aerialrevenge]

I liked it. I liked the angle at first, the way you used the topic in your own way. I especially liked the patteren and rhyming in the bridge. I also liked the way you refered to the way writing the song made you feel within the song. The one thing i didnt like was the whole gun to the head thing.
8/10

[VanitysNewGun]

alright, thank you very much for reading!