Not sure on a title. PLEASE CRIT

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I am not sure about a title for this song yet. It is about being insecure and knowing that you are the only one that can controll how you feel and it is about not caring what other people think, and that kind of thing. Not exactly sure what genere prob alt rock or something like that, Decently fast, and it does flow nicely if it has the right tune, which I guess is the one I wrote it to.

I will crit for crit if the crits I get are good ones and they help.



I AM
The one who will make my mistakes
and who'll walk my own path today
I SEE
The way you look and you act
The way you judge and you laugh at me

Bu I don't care anymore
My fears all gone out the door
my self consciousness has gone away
It doesn't matter anymore what you think
I won't let it rule my life anymore

I AM
The one who will make my mistakes
and who'll walk my own path today
I SEE
The way you look and you act
The way you judge and you laugh at me

I've got better things to do
than worry about what you think
I won't waste another day
Givin' a **** what you think
My time gotta be wort more than your thoughts
My time should be worth more
than your thoughts

I AM
The one who will make my mistakes
and who'll walk my own path today
I SEE
The way you look and you act
The way you judge and you laugh at me

(This part would probably have a slower, different feel than the rest of the song)

Cause you laugh when I fall
The scars stays
but the memories fade away

And ten years from now
I won't remeber what you said to me
and ten years from now
I won't remeber the things you said about me
Cause time goes by
and it doesn't matter how bad it may seem
A minutes still a minute
A day is still a day
The seconds keep counting
while the clock keeps on ticking
Time away

And no matter what you think
I won't let it change me
And I won't you make me feel this way again

(Song owuld speed back up and go back to the normal feel)

I AM
The one who will make my mistakes
and who'll walk my own path today
I SEE
The way you look and you act
The way you judge and you laugh at me

[VivaLaSam461]

Imic

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I am confused

[islamicbob5342]

I AM
A little bit insecure a little unconfidant
But you don't understand I do what I can and sometimes I don't make sense
I AM
What you never want to say but I never had a doubt
It's like no matter what I do I can't convince you for once just to hear me out


Good first verse... can't help thinking that I've heard it somewhere before though...

[vlcmlumenouslama]

tis linkin park!

[VivaLaSam461]

Dude you copy cat, this is original lyrics, not other peoples stuff. Your not a good writer if u copy.

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First off, using one line that someone else uses is not copy cat "I Am" plus it isn't even that genere of music. Although granted i could see how you would make that mistake. Different message, and only one line is close. Plus there only so many words in the english language. This is distressing, I am guessing that anyone who commented on this maybe read the first 5 lines than stopped. For one the chorus goes.

I AM
The one who will make my mistakes
and who'll walk my own path today
I SEE
The way you look and you act
The way you judge and you laugh at me

I could see that it is the same format. two words two lines two words. But I truely didn't intend to try to or copy someone else. Also I am pretty sure it has a different flow. I can't show you unless I have music for it or sing it.


(This part would probably have a slower, different feel than the rest of the song)

Cause you laugh when I fall
The scars stays
but the memories fade away

And ten years from now
I won't remeber what you said to me
and ten years from now
I won't remeber the things you said about me
Cause time goes by
and it doesn't matter how bad it may seem
A minutes still a minute
A day is still a day
The seconds keep counting
while the clock keeps on ticking
Time away

And no matter what you think
I won't let it change me
And I won't you make me feel this way again

(Song owuld speed back up and go back to the normal feel)

I am also pretty sure linkin park doesn't change feels like that. I haven't heard that song in a long time so I am not totally sure. Also again like I said totally different genere, linkin park is rap/rock I think and this is more alt/rock or emo sounding. Also again, I can't really argue my point unless you could hear me sing it, or I had music recorded for it which I don't.

If anyone is gonna give actual crits instead of just saying copy go for it, I want to know what you guys think.

[islamicbob5342]

I was just messing with you man I didn't say you copied anyone. But honestly when I read that it was about insecurity and I read those first lines I couldn't stop reading them in the form of that Linkin Park song Faint. Seems like an ok song, the lyrics honestly are a lot like Linkin Park even excluding the verse similarities to Faint. I really am not impressed that much by LP's lyrics though and these don't even quite measure up to that level. Not bad really just kind of generic. The writing is plain and the theme is boring. The best part to me is the part about time just because it actually says something other than just "You wronged me and I'm not going to put up with you no more." I'd give it a 6.5/10.
Feel free to tear my song apart now if you feel so inclined:
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367383

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bump

[PunkSkater163]

Wow honestly I really loved this song. awsome job man! Not only do I love the hole concept and Idea, I thought the wording was great to! And I loved the tune if its anything like what I was thinken. Im probuablly wrong but I was singing it with a cheshire cat or dude ranch (2 old blink-182 cds) tune. Great job man I love. Sorry to say I dont have a lot of criticisim.
mind critting mine?
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=369574

[PunkSkater163]

Sorry I missed apart of the song, i just read it. holy crap dude i love the song. If it has the feel and tune im thinken it could be like the best song ive ever seen on this site. I love the idea and concept so much. every word is so true, and its hard to do that and have it havea great tune and wording all at the same time! Kick *** job man!
Are you in a band?