I'm Not Complaining

[the thomas]

She had grass in her hair, and an awkward smile on her face. I don't want to fight tonight. Let's wait it out. Tears filled her face when she said, "Your father is dead, and I'm trying to deal with it." I pushed and shoved and ended up with wind on my face instead. This winter is cold and this feels so impressive. The drive is long and my hands are numb. I'm going to forget, I'm going to forget. My thoughts are collapsing, and I'm not complaining. You are whining and this is ignorance. This way to good to be true.

[emo=elmow/otheL]

Hmm...Very cool structure. By that I mean the lack of structure. I wouldnt change a thing. I dont see how it could be viable as a song but its still pretty cool. 10/10 for uniqueness. The penguins will be watching.

[the thomas]

thanks for the reply, emo. do you have anything i can crit for you?

[sc0tt0]

I really like it because you are so descriptive and allow the reader to experience what the person is feeling. Your really good at this. I agree with emo all the way 10/10