First Lesson Of Falling

[fingers07]

it was such a pretty picture
but i think im gonna break
the scars from your love are buried deep
you finally pushed me out

and im just here with nothin
nothin left to keep
im flying without my wings and i cant stop

so tonight i'll take my first lesson on
how to fall with grace
maybe one day you will see
the smile back on my face


need an extra verse can some add one... crit and i'll crit back leave a link tho

[epihasi]

ok, umm.. I don`t know what to say about this piece. It`s fine, I guess. It's not Akerfeldt songwriting, but that`s ok! I`d say look over it once more and maybe add one or two verses, as you said. I`m not going to add a verse for you, I think that`s too cheap :)
But yeah, so far so good :thumb:
7.5/10

[StrangelyBrewed13]

Is this your first song? if it is its very good. Dont ask someone to write your lyrics for you its dishonest to the songs.UHH...the song doesnt have any thing special so theres not realy much to critique. But if you could crit mine thad be supper.

[StrangelyBrewed13]

Is this your first song? if it is its very good. Dont ask someone to write your lyrics for you its dishonest to the songs.UHH...the song doesnt have any thing special so theres not realy much to critique. But if you could crit mine thad be supper. http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367799

[emo=elmow/otheL]

Hmm, I hate to crit this, it just...well it just isn't finished. It's like Comfortably Numb without David Gilmours kickass guitar solo. There are spots where it seems forced but that might be me. Other then that just put some meat on them bones man. Oh and heres my latest.
http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367871