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iainb
07-19-2005, 11:10 AM
This song is kind of awkward to explain, but the lyrics in brackets start at the same time as the lyrics out of brackets on the same line. Kind of like the dual singing part of 'The Handsome Life of Swing' by lostprophets except this has one yelling and one singing. One last thing, the name is kind of a piss take as this song is meant to be heavy,


Take back everything you said (put a bullet in my head)
It's all just messing with my head (I've had enough of what you said)
Stop compairing me with them (It's all just happening again)
It's like you want it all to end (I don't act like they did then)

Chorus
Why d'you always bring them up
When I "haven't done enough" (When I "haven't done enough")
Sometimes trying's just too tough
Are you really worth the fuss?

Whenever we get in a fight
Like the one the other night
You say that you do all the work
And that I make you feel like dirt

Chorus
Why d'you always bring them up
When I "haven't done enough" (When I "haven't done enough")
Sometimes trying's just too tough
Are you really worth the fuss?

Maybe we should end it here
May we never shed a tear
Could I ever let you go?
The answer you already know

Why d'you always bring them up (Take back everything you said)
When I "haven't done enough" (It's all just messing with my head)
Sometimes trying's just too tough (Stop compairing me with them)
Are you really worth the fuss? (It's like you want it all to end)

Why d'you always bring them up (Whenever we get in a fight)
When I "haven't done enough" (Like the one the other night)
Sometimes trying's just too tough (You say that you do all the work)
Are you really worth the fuss? (And that I make you feel like dirt)

Why d'you always bring them up (Maybe we should end it here)
When I "haven't done enough" (May we never shed a tear)
Sometimes trying's just too tough (Could I ever let you go?)
Are you really worth the fuss? (The answer you already know)

[this is still part of the same song but its in a completely different style, different tempo, etc. Really mellow and chilled out]

Sit down
Listen to every word I say

Stay here
Dont go away, dont go away

Wait there
Hear what I need to say

StrangelyBrewed13
07-19-2005, 08:52 PM
Its a cool concept. Some of the ryhmes seem a little forced but no big deal. The AABB ryhme scheme can do that to songs. I like the imagery and it works well thats mine http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367799

emo=elmow/otheL
07-19-2005, 09:25 PM
Yeah, its a pretty neat idea to have 2 completely different parts going like that as long as it doesnt muddy up the sound. Ive heard stuff like that before but not often. Overall, 8.5/10. http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367770
Hey I know how to make links now! :chug:

sportsfan4427
07-19-2005, 11:30 PM
god d.a.m.n that nice idea...wish it would have been mine
Plus the song was well written
In the chorus you might wanna just have one person sing but it's your song
but nice job
8/10

iainb
07-22-2005, 11:32 AM
Thanks for the kind words guys. Much appreciated