Ghosts With Machetes

[DazedMountainTop]

It's short, but whatever. Tear it up.

I can sit all night
And watch the stars collide
While you hold on to him
I’ll burn myself alive

Shroud yourself in silk
It will be the last you see of me
Mandate the history
Giving you up to the silence you bleed

Wrapped up in the wrong way down
You’ve sewn yourself shut
Wrapped up in the wrong way down
You’ve sewn yourself shut

[epihasi]

cooool...I like it somehow. It's just short and I like that.. I can picture it acoustic, the instruments playing something along the line of `tho bid you farewell` by opeth. If you don`t know the song, listen to it, you`ll see what I mean.
9/10 :thumb:

[emo=elmow/otheL]

Some rhymes seem almost forced but not quite...And its almost too short but not quite...Lovely little dichotomy. I see what Epihasi means about the whole acoustic song thing. I can kind of see it as an acoustic prelude to something heavier like a two part thing along the lines of Parabol and Parabola by Tool. I'd say this song is great the way it is. 9/10
Here take a look at mine:http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=367770

[emo=elmow/otheL]

Oh and that is by far the greatest song title I have heard in ages!

[epihasi]

Oh and that is by far the greatest song title I have heard in ages!


Very true :thumb:

[DazedMountainTop]

Thanks everybody. I didn't expect this to get good reviews. I figured everyone would bash it to hell since it was so short. Thanks...I'm thinking about what you said, about the Parabol and Parabla...I'm probably going to make a pt. 2 to this. Thanks everyone.