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shacklecrow
07-19-2005, 07:40 AM
ok this song, ditty, poem whatever you want to call it came to me one night when i was bored trying to finish off some lyrics of some songs i had been writing.
Please crit it truthfuly, i dont mind if people hate it, its just a silly ryming thing, but if you hate it say why you hate it plz.
it based on the fairy tale jack and the beanstalk but ti always thought it would be better if the ginat had got jack so here it is, lol

Jack and the GIant


The blood and tears of a broken dream
All you got now is you’re magic beans
You sold you’re cow to slavery
I hope you choke on your god**** beans

Up and up the beanstalk you climbed
Back with stolen gold where are you to dine
The Giant is gonna come looking for you
And when he finds you he’s gonna cook you in a stew

You brought out your axe, you horrible sod
You looked up at the sky and prayed to god
You started to chop down the great bean stalk
You tried to kill the giant you made him balk

The giant stepped off the great bean stalk
He turned around and started to walk
Jack saw the giant come hither
So he pulled up his britches, the so called giants dinner

Then Jack tripped and fell in the dirt
He rolled over his body did hurt
Just as the giant stood over and leaned
Jack choked on one of his beans

And so ends the story of Jack
But what happened to body of Jack
The giant did cook Jack in a stew
Now don’t look around all he’ll come for you

If you don’t believe my tale of Jack
Ask his mother who’s on the giant’s wrack
Waiting a time when the giant sees fit
To gobble her up every single last bit