Daystar
07-05-2005, 06:58 PM
Here's how things work. I will post my song. You will critique. You post your songs, critique from me guaranteed.
Remember The Forgotten
Remember me.
Remember the fog, the day, the night before.
Remember the diner where her death was born.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
I said nothing, just slathered on mustard.
I stared at my burger, my world was shattered
I don't know where she was buried, but she broke my heart.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
(Tammy the teacher, Tammy the friend, ruined my life when she met her end.)
She never lied, not when she taught.
Never lied, only forgot.
She remembered to come back like she said.
2 weeks later alive or dead.
Remember the forgotten,
the dead or the rotten.
They'll remember you.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
(Tammy the teacher, Tammy the friend, ruined my life when she met her end.)
Remember me.
Remember the fog, the day, the night before.
Remember the diner where her death was born.
This song was about Tammy McCartney, my 6th grade L.A. teacher, who died soon after having my class.
Remember The Forgotten
Remember me.
Remember the fog, the day, the night before.
Remember the diner where her death was born.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
I said nothing, just slathered on mustard.
I stared at my burger, my world was shattered
I don't know where she was buried, but she broke my heart.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
(Tammy the teacher, Tammy the friend, ruined my life when she met her end.)
She never lied, not when she taught.
Never lied, only forgot.
She remembered to come back like she said.
2 weeks later alive or dead.
Remember the forgotten,
the dead or the rotten.
They'll remember you.
Don't tell me, I know by the look in your eyes.
The end, don't tell me, the end so despised.
She died 9:30 September the 12.
Couldn't be helped, couldn't be helped.
Remember.
Remember the forgotten
(Tammy the teacher, Tammy the friend, ruined my life when she met her end.)
Remember me.
Remember the fog, the day, the night before.
Remember the diner where her death was born.
This song was about Tammy McCartney, my 6th grade L.A. teacher, who died soon after having my class.