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ATC
07-04-2005, 03:09 PM
I doubt if I do the whole crit for crit thing (unless I like your work), so no promises.

Innerspace


I could stop time and I could pretend
That it stops the tide to know
All the answers,
When all I care about are the questions,
Those asked and unsaid.

After all this time, I know
Salvation looks just the way it should
When you're staring across the other side of here.

I would worship a word and write the name
Halfway across the placid sky.
And it wasnt me that told you
That everything's blowing in the wind,
But if I cared about whats right and whats wrong,
Surely I must know just when I should stop.

Almost all our words are
spoken in our silence.

Someone's alive, bleeding from a thousand breaths
You might have tried to compare.

HitHardDrums55
07-04-2005, 03:44 PM
nice work...i really like that no complaints that i can think of...

by any chance a Yovee fan?

check out mine, i'm changing a few parts but theyre posted in the thread as well, it's not too long here's the link http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=360699

HypnotiQSorcerer
07-04-2005, 03:53 PM
.... i have no idea what its about
sounds rather religious to me

Popeye
07-04-2005, 07:16 PM
Another I liked. It was a little out there and kind of confusing but it was still great. Not too many complaints, It just doesn't make sense every once in a while. Good Job.

P.s. HypnotiQSorcerer is kind of right. It sounds really religious.

ATC
07-05-2005, 03:17 PM
It isn't meant to be a religious song. But hey, whatever you get from it works.

HitHardDrums55
07-05-2005, 03:23 PM
addicted_tochaos, you by any chance a Yovee fan?

ATC
07-05-2005, 06:07 PM
I'm not sure who Yovee is, though if they're good, recommend me something and I'd be glad to give them a listen.


Edit: If its about my user name, Addicted to chaos was the first hard rock/metal song I learnt to play. It's by Megadeth. I'm downloading the song with the same name by Yovee as I type.

drummerben
07-05-2005, 08:09 PM
I really enjoyed this piece. Interesting choice of diction, put lots of images in my mind. Good poem!

HitHardDrums55
07-05-2005, 10:26 PM
yeah addicted to chaos is a pretty good song...acoustic rock...one of my favorites by them is Dreamer on the Run or City Strollin', or Rage in Ruins...i dunno all their songs are good they only have 1 EP out, if u know who Kut U Up is, it's the same singer that sings most of their stuff just better