My Muse has died

[Turtle Heads]

just made this song(literally) hopefully it's not too too bad, please crit

today my muse has died
I am void
heart split in two
by a jab of confession
the raven stalks me in my sleep
I am now alone
blood trails behind my feet

inspiration to live
inspiration to breath
inspiration I sought
inspiration I received
my muse has died
my muse has died
my muse has died

the days seem longer, I'm losing control
no place to hide when the bell tolls
put to my own devices, I shall fail
over and over and over
my muse has died

inspiration to live
inspiration to breath
inspiration I sought
inspiration I received
my muse has died
my muse has died
my muse has died

her death brings new life
which I can not enjoy
every breath I take means nothing
now that I am void
my muse has died

[apocalypseNOW]

seems liek a purty g'd poem in my opinon. i could feel the mood. i liek the first verse the most. the seconds just seems forced. and its a bit repititive. maybe just a little work? 6.5/10.

[Turtle Heads]

thanks for the crit