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apocalypseNOW
06-20-2005, 07:44 PM
alrihgt. as ive said before anything g'd or bad is greatly appreciated. i think its a little bit messy, needs sum work, and a bit to metaphorical. its also kinda long. so read up

In this shooting range
I've been shot from far away
Even a scope with such magnitude
Can never see through to the real you.

A book with an odd cover
Should run for a cover of its own
Because the hand behind the gun
Has decided what you have to say

Looking into the barrel
There are apples with poisoned cores
And when you eat these tasty fruits
You eat what you never deserved

The hand that feeds, bites
And you eat what it serves
Judgement comes out there mouth
And feeds right into yours

Bullet proof vest aren't neccesary
Just be yourself and take the hit

A vest can't do that for you

There are so many gun men out there
But not enough bullet proof vests
So do as you please and tell what you believe
Or else you'll have failed the test

And the gun men have passed with cheating
But never cheat, because its like a "what if" essay

Well what if you cheat?

Then yourself, you will disown
Because the right answers are what you want to write

The right answers are your own

usedgreenromance
06-20-2005, 07:55 PM
dammit its brillent!
the only thing i didnt liek was the verse
Looking into the barrel
There are apples with poisoned cores
And when you eat these tasty fruits
You eat what you never deserved
everythign else was awesome

TheOpeningAct101
06-20-2005, 11:30 PM
great song. the flow gets jumpy here and there but nothin serous. good job. first verse is favorite part. only thing is try to find something else to say besides bullet proof vest.