An Old Joke

[apocalypseNOW]

Our lives were jokes without laughs
And without a crystal ball
The future changes

And when the joke was told with such wit
Our ignorance was bliss
We took it for granted

Sometimes we wish we'd had a sense of humor
And sometimes we deny our bitterness
And say we laughed

The joke was so **** funny
I wish I could laugh
But jokes get old

And so does the past

alrihgt. you can say whatever you want. i had a little bit of a mini-creative-spur and i had to write htis.

[VivaLaSam461]

Yes

[spnj]

I like the ending. not becuase the song is done... but because it is well written. I think what you have gets progressivly better as you got going, which is usually the opposite of what normally happens. I think the crystal ball line was your weakest point as well... overall my opinion is to take the last lines and try and fit the song more around that idea

[JaveryAM]

uhhh... well... i personally am not too fond of this piece... i dunno why... it seemed awkward reading in the beginning, where it mentions the crystal ball... it was ok though...

[apocalypseNOW]

thanks guys. any more opinons - feel free to share. im open to anything