Need tips on writing a song (also crit this 1)

[Snak3]

I wrote this thing on class the other day, it may sound stupid but still i wrote it :). need some tips on writing songs.

(not trying to offennd anyone here)


He's a geeky four-eyed guy
siting beside me, asking why?
I think he is alittle bit queer
I think he takes it in the rear.

Ohho! he is a wuss
Ohoho! he is a wuss
**** i hate that stupid p***

You may think this guy is weird
He is always showing some fear
He's always smoking grass
Think he takes it in the ***

Ohho! he is a wuss
Ohoho! he is a wuss
**** i hate that stupid p***

Join him, his name is randal
unlikely to see him as a bandal
Think he is sucking ****
F***, he's screwing toddler Rick


thats it, hope you enjoyed it.
ps:insulting no one, names just came to my mind while writing it.

[AngusYoung413]

I think that was pretty unoriginal and vulgar IMO. Not trying to offend your writing just being honest. A weird song subject obviously. Oh and when writing try to go to a place where you can clear your head. And write everything down, even if you think you'll never use it, you may find out a month later that you love it.

[Snak3]

its sounds offensive i know

thnx for the tip.