Inescapable

[JaveryAM]

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Inescapable
You're so red
Your eyes aflame
Crying from the crypts
Trained to kill
Assassinating

Your bewildered mutterings under your crisp winter breath
Breathing in your hate deeply, controlled
But only for so long
As the moist depression leaves it's entrails along her face
Those tears filled with venom
The acid in your seething, singeing, burning agony
Writhing in pain-drenched pre-demise
But not for long

Your sudden loss of power
Depleting so utterly quickly
Slowly creeping from your sweat-stained pores
The infinite energy source you had once contained
Leaking out from you
Consuming you in selfpity
Devoured by Failure itself
Enfeebled to the extent of unrevertation

Try to fortify yourself
With every available resource
You can not, can you?
You are so disabled!
Die, my sweet
Perish, please
It's so beautiful

Struggling, with every nerve, slowly spliced
The last recognition of feeling has past
Abandoning your sour sweetness to loneliness
Entrenching in your heart, the empty remembrence of love
'Twas all a conspired prevarication
But you stumbled into my falsities
You drank from the blood-laced goblet which I have cast out before you
You razed the last drop of your safe sanity,
Hurtling all of your discretion aside

No more will the sun rise upon your expiring face
It won't shine on your bleeding carcass
Carelessly ignoring your woe-be-gone soul

[sherbondy]

i'm really not into this type of music but it had a good flow and you do a good job of using different words for each phase of the song good job

[JaveryAM]

thanks man i love you
haha

[JaveryAM]

bump bump bumpity bump.