hey wanted an opinion

[BCDRUMMER121]

hey everyone this is my band we just recorded a song. i wanted some feedback on the song and also the recording and what could be done to fix this thanx

heres the link

www.myspace.com/farfromelysium

[stoivenismyname]

hey everyone this is my band we just recorded a song. i wanted some feedback on the song and also the recording and what could be done to fix this thanx

heres the link

www.myspace.com/farfromelysium


gday, just listened to that 'stupid sad song', heres the feedback: i kinda liked it, but, IMO it sounds the same from start to the end, theres no twists or climax in the song, no emotions, especially the vocals eg. i was expecting to hear the 'screamo' at the the last 'you never knew me at all' (hope i got the lyrics right), and you have created the mood for it too, but the singer just talked like he did for the rest of the song, abit of anticlimax really. it sounds like either the singer has a very narrow vocal range, or he doesnt use it properly. the music is ok in my opinion, the recording quality isnt the best so i cant really tell, would perfer better clarity though. druming is good. overall i do think it has the potential. :D

[Cannonball Jake]

I heard Stupid Sad Song and I liked it but I agree that the end just loses impact. Like at 2:20 where you come out of the middle 8 into the chorus riff again the song should explode, it's so well set up. But it just sort of rolls to a stop.

If the screamo backup vox kicked in again at that point (2:21) and the lead vox still came in where they do now (2:27) and sing at least two more lines (but 6 would be better) it would kick arse massively, like a fkn supernuke.

The other bit that loses impact is the drums need to be way tighter and roll more, it sounds like the drummer is playing too uptight. Real power drumming needs to sit in the groove and the drummer needs to loosen his upper body more so he can tighten the beat. The problem is, if your drummer is playing uptight and you tell him he needs to relax he'll probably get more uptight. On the other hand, he could be just a new drummer and the groove will come with experience, just heaps and heaps of playing.

I like all the vocals though, the backup vox screamo is on the money and the main vox have good tension and release. The melody in the verse is quite subtle, like the other post says, it's almost like the singer is talking the lyrics to a beat, but there's a definite melody and it goes real well with the riff. The chorus is a ripper too and that's the hardest thing to pull off in songwriting, a good chorus. The simplicity of it is what lets it take off.

All the riffs are cool too, and in general the construction of the whole song with the way the verses have good tension into the chorus release. It's only really the end that lets it down and the end is real important.

[BCDRUMMER121]

hey thanx for the feedback :thumb:

[Cannonball Jake]

hey thanx for the feedback :thumb:

Sweet bro, if you get a chance let me know your opinion on these tunes (http://www.musicianforums.com/forums/showthread.php?t=348629). And don't worry if you don't like em, all feedback is good.