New acoustic rock song...please listen

[Foursticks]

ok well i finally wrote a new song. its acoustic but has a full band. It kinda of reminds me of vertical horizon. its a cool tune. has 7/4 timing in the bridge. overall a pretty cool tune. please listen and crituque!! ..please listen
its called acoustic rock (http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/dizzyrhythmsmusic.htm)

[Foursticks]

anyone?

[fuzzyhair]

hold on im going to listen to it.

[fuzzyhair]

It needs lyrics. Sounds good though. How did you do the drums?

[Foursticks]

drum machine thanks

[Foursticks]

anyone else?

[Cannonball Jake]

ok well i finally wrote a new song. its acoustic but has a full band. It kinda of reminds me of vertical horizon. its a cool tune. has 7/4 timing in the bridge. overall a pretty cool tune. please listen and crituque!! ..please listen
its called acoustic rock (http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/dizzyrhythmsmusic.htm)

It's pretty solid in the verses and chorus bro, the little bridge after the first chorus could lose the flange effect though, but that's just a personal thing. It always seems to take the energy out of song for me. But if you like flange keep it.

I like the adventurousnes of the middle 8's 7/4 shift but the momentum really goes out of the tune, the riff's just not hooky enough, and it sort of runs out of steam.

[Foursticks]

ok thanks

[oSnAp]

yo need lyrics good rytem u just need some lyrics

[Peanutman514]

Yea definitely lose the flange effect and your good. I like the idea with the flange effect in the bridge but it just doesnt work, good anyways. Maybe you can find something else. Other than that great job man!

[Foursticks]

yeah i thought maybe it was a little too much...and yeah it really does need lyrics...soon it will...thanks

[Foursticks]

anyone else?

[Inspired]

sounds like something from a three doors down album, thats a compliment by the way :)

Really needs lyrics to keep folk interested tho, go for it!

[Foursticks]

thanks...3 dog night are awesome

[mayonaise]

not bad, could be ten times better with singing and lyrics. the bridge part where it switches times was kinda cool. the guitar sounded somewhat one-dimensional, my only complaint. what drum machine program did you use? me and my cousin were recording some stuff, and we needed a drum machine.

[Foursticks]

its a zoom 234 thing you have to play it...its a drum machine not a progtram

[Foursticks]

anyone else?

[Foursticks]

bump^

[Kilisab]

Nicely done... love some of the progressions. Strong chorus/bridge, I dig it...

Beautiful piece, and I rarely say that. As has been stated, flanger is overdone. Something I would buy.

If you need a complaint to help you improve, I think the main riff sounds too generic... not that its a bad thing, or that you should change it... just something you can keep in mind for the future.

[mikethecoug]

that's pretty nice, drum machine works well, needs lyrics, it's good though. :)

[Foursticks]

thanks yeah...i want to add some hooks and stuff to spice it up

[Foursticks]

aynone else?

[ragingrob]

Solid stuff, add lyrics and then update.

[FUBARGNV]

very nice...

real drums + vocals = even better ;)


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[Foursticks]

thanks

[Foursticks]

anyone else?

[smith]

i liked the flange! really good man.

[Foursticks]

thanks man i appreciate all of the replys

[PinkFloydFan]

hey, I really enjoyed this. Plus I listened to most of ur other songs too, and man uv got some talent...

[Foursticks]

thanks a lot pink i appreciate it

[Foursticks]

anybody else wanna listen?

[Britton]

Well Yea I liked it pretty uniqe you seem really talented

[psychodelicmonkeyfromspace]

its good, i don't like the 4th chord in the progression but that's probably just me. good work